[Int-dir] draft-kivinen-802-15-ie-02.txt

[Charlie Perkins <[e-mail]>]

Hello folks,

I am an assigned INT directorate reviewer for 
<draft-kivinen-802-15-ie-02.txt>.  These comments were written primarily 
for the benefit of the Internet Area Directors. Document editors and 
shepherd(s) should treat these comments just like they would treat 
comments from any other IETF contributors and resolve them along with 
any other Last Call comments that have been received. For more details 
on the INT Directorate, see http://www.ietf.org/iesg/directorate.html.

I made a lot of minor editorial changes to the draft, because I think 
that the draft needs improvements for readability and clarity.  For this 
purpose, please see the attached files. 
draft-kivinen-802-15-ie-02cep.txt contains all of my comments (marked 
with "CEP") and revisions.

A few more general comments:

  * I do not understand why Section 5 is included.  It doesn't seem to
    have any effect on the request for allocation.
  * Section 6 should be reworded so that the request is made to ANA, not
    802.15.4
  * Since all uses of the newly allocated IE will share the same
    security model, perhaps it should be mentioned that if a different
    security model is needed, another IE might be requested
  * Although I have made a number of editorial suggestions, I think the
    document still will need a close proofreading.

For other comments, please refer to the attached rfcdiff file.

Regards,
Charlie P.