[Iotops] Alissa Cooper's Block on charter-ietf-iotops-00-09: (with BLOCK and COMMENT)

[Alissa Cooper via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Alissa Cooper has entered the following ballot position for
charter-ietf-iotops-00-09: Block

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BLOCK:
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(1) I agree with Alvaro that the reference to RFC 8799 is not appropriate in
this charter. Using the well understood "administrative domain" terminology
would be better.

(2) The charter contains some contradictory language about its scope. Looking
at this:

"The IETF is or has worked on a number of technologies related to IoT. These
include work done in ANIMA, CBOR, CORE, DRIP, LAKE, LPWAN, LWIG, ROLL, SUIT,
and 6TISCH.  IOTOPS is intended to be a discussion venue where people can
discuss how the various technologies developed in these WGs fit together, what
gaps remain, what has been learnt from deploying these, etc.

IOTOPS will solicit input on IoT-device-related operational issues and
practices, and existing and proposed technologies related to the deployment,
operational management, and lifecycle management of IoT devices.  IOTOPS
provides a venue for IoT experts and other interested parties to engage in
discussions of IoT requirements of networking standards, as well as proposals
for new uses of IP technology in IoT specific scenarios."

Comparing this to the numbered list of work areas at the end of the charter, it
seems that the objective is to be much more focused than the text above
implies. I would suggest some edits to the text above, condensing down to one
paragraph:

The IETF is or has worked on a number of technologies related to IoT. These
include work done in ANIMA, CBOR, CORE, DRIP, LAKE, LPWAN, LWIG, ROLL, SUIT,
and 6TISCH. IOTOPS will solicit input on IoT-device-related operational issues
and practices, and existing and proposed technologies related to the
deployment, operational management, and lifecycle management of IoT devices. 
IOTOPS provides a venue for IoT experts and other interested parties to engage
in discussions of operational IoT requirements, as well as proposals for new
uses of IP technology related to IoT device and network operations.


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COMMENT:
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s/The IETF is or has worked on/The IETF works on/

OLD
These include work done in ANIMA, CBOR, CORE, DRIP, LAKE, LPWAN, LWIG, ROLL,
SUIT, and 6TISCH.

NEW
This includes work done in ANIMA, CBOR, CORE, DRIP, LAKE, LPWAN, LWIG, ROLL,
SUIT, 6TISCH, and other working groups.

Is the list of WGs supposed to be limited or exhaustive? In addition to the
missing ones others have pointed out there is TEEP.

OLD
Revision, updates, and extensions related to existing WGs will be done in those
WGs.

NEW
Revision, updates, and extensions related to work in existing WGs will be done
in those WGs.