Re: [ippm] [Last-Call] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-ippm-rfc8889bis-02

Russ, thank you for your review. I have entered a Discuss ballot for this document based on my own review.

Lars

> On 2022-6-29, at 7:03, Russ Housley via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> wrote:
> 
> Reviewer: Russ Housley
> Review result: Ready with Nits
> 
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> Document: draft-ietf-ippm-rfc8889bis-02
> Reviewer: Russ Housley
> Review Date: 2022-06-29
> IETF LC End Date: 2022-06-21
> IESG Telechat date: 2022-07-14
> 
> 
> Summary: Ready with Nits
> 
> 
> Major Concerns: None
> 
> 
> Minor Concerns:
> 
> Section 8 says: "... can be incorporated into A, ..."
> I think that "A" is described in Figure 5, but it took me
> a few minutes to figure that out.  Please clarify.
> 
> 
> Section 9 says:
> 
>   Either one or two flag bits might be available for marking in
>   different deployments:
> 
> This is followed by three labeled paragraphs.  Can this sentence
> be expanded to cover all three of the paragraphs that follow?
> 
> 
> Nits:
> 
> Section 5.1: s/split our monitoring/split the monitoring/
> 
> Section 5.1: s/In our monitoring network/In the monitoring network/
> 
> Section 5.1 says:
> 
>   The algorithm described above network is an iterative clustering
>   algorithm, but it is also possible to apply a recursive clustering
>   algorithm by using the node-node adjacency matrix representation
>   [IEEE-ACM-ToN-MPNPM].
> 
> I cannot understand is sentence.
> 
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Re: [ippm] [Last-Call] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-ippm-rfc8889bis-02

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