[IPsec] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-ipsecme-ikev1-algo-to-historic-08: (with COMMENT)

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# GEN AD review of draft-ietf-ipsecme-ikev1-algo-to-historic-08

CC @larseggert

Thanks to Roni Even for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
(https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/rK3E1XT4aINFH14eXi90vEqPa0o).

## Nits

All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

### Typos

#### Section 4.2, paragraph 1
```
-    method was never standarized in IKEv1.  Those IKEv1 systems that
+    method was never standardized in IKEv1.  Those IKEv1 systems that
+                            +
```

### Outdated references

Reference `[RFC4306]` to `RFC4306`, which was obsoleted by `RFC5996` (this may
be on purpose).

Reference `[RFC2407]` to `RFC2407`, which was obsoleted by `RFC4306` (this may
be on purpose).

Reference `[RFC2409]` to `RFC2409`, which was obsoleted by `RFC4306` (this may
be on purpose).

Reference `[RFC2408]` to `RFC2408`, which was obsoleted by `RFC4306` (this may
be on purpose).

### URLs

These URLs point to tools.ietf.org, which has been taken out of service:

 * https://tools.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-ipsecme-labeled-ipsec-06.txt

### Grammar/style

#### Section 6, paragraph 1
```
ocument instructs IANA to add an additional Status column to the IKEv2 Transf
                          ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
This phrase might be redundant. Consider either removing or replacing the
adjective "additional".

#### Section 7, paragraph 5
```
ment] Figure 3 Transform Type 4 - Diffie Hellman Group Transform IDs Number
                                  ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
This word is normally spelled with a hyphen.

## Notes

This review is in the ["IETF Comments" Markdown format][ICMF], You can use the
[`ietf-comments` tool][ICT] to automatically convert this review into
individual GitHub issues. Review generated by the [`ietf-reviewtool`][IRT].

[ICMF]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments/blob/main/format.md
[ICT]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments
[IRT]: https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool