Re: [Last-Call] [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-ace-cmpv2-coap-transport-05

[Mohit Sahni <[e-mail]>]

Hi Lars and Miral,
Thanks for your review and comments, Please see my response for your
comments:

>## Comments
>
>### Boilerplate
>
>This document uses the RFC2119 keywords "SHOULD", "NOT RECOMMENDED",
>"OPTIONAL", "SHOULD NOT", "SHALL", "MAY", "RECOMMENDED", "SHALL NOT", "MUST
>NOT", "MUST", and "REQUIRED", but does not contain the recommended RFC8174
>boilerplate. (It contains some text with a similar beginning.)
>
<M.S.> This is autogenerated by the IETF tools. I just submitted the draft
in xml format.
>
>## Nits
>
>All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may
choose to
>address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
>automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so
there
>will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what
you
>did with these suggestions.
>
>### Section 4, paragraph 0
>```
>  4.  Security Considerations
>```
>Why is this a list of bullets instead of just regular text?
>
<M.S.> I added bullets to make it more readable.
>
>### Uncited references
>
>Uncited references: `[RFC5280]`.
>
<M.S.> I will add the citations for CRL in the appropriate places in the
draft.
>
>### Outdated references
>
>Document references `draft-ietf-lamps-lightweight-cmp-profile-13`, but
`-21` is
>the latest available revision.
<M.S.> I will update the revision.
>
>### Grammar/style
>
>#### Section 2.3, paragraph 1
>```
>ional and potentially large fields. Thus a CMP message can be much larger
tha
>                                    ^^^^
>```
>A comma may be missing after the conjunctive/linking adverb "Thus".
<M.S.> I will add the comma.
>## Notes
>

Thanks
Mohit

On Mon, Apr 24, 2023 at 5:53 AM Lars Eggert <[e-mail]> wrote:

> Meral, thank you for your review! I have entered a No Objection ballot.
>
> Lars
>
> > On 25. Oct 2022, at 09:01, Meral Shirazipour via Datatracker <
> [e-mail]> wrote:
> >
> > Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
> > Review result: Ready with Nits
> >
> > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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> > Document: draft-ietf-ace-cmpv2-coap-transport-05
> > Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
> > Review Date: 2022-10-24
> > IETF LC End Date: 2022-10-27
> > IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
> >
> > Summary:This draft is almost ready to be published as Standard RFC, no
> other
> > comments than those on the list.
> >
> > Major issues:
> >
> > Minor issues:
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> > Nits/editorial comments:
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