Re: [lp-wan] Yangdoctors early review of draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-compound-ack-14
Sergio Aguilar Romero <sergio.aguilar.romero@upc.edu> Tue, 04 April 2023 23:09 UTC
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Subject: Re: [lp-wan] Yangdoctors early review of draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-compound-ack-14
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Hello Ebben, Hope you are doing well. Thanks for your review. We have published a new version (-17) addressing all the comments. Please let us know if they are addressed correctly, specially the IANA Consideration text. Best regards, Authors Compound ACK draft > On Apr 1, 2023, at 5:43 PM, Ebben Aries <exa@juniper.net> wrote: > > Hi Sergio, > > I've gone ahead and re-reviewed based off the latest -16 publish and > appears quite a few items were not addressed as previously suggested. > See below. > > Validation > - The modules still fail to validate. Below was not actually addressed > as your `derived-from()` function should rather be > `derived-from-or-self()`. You can validate this data as well using > yanglint. > Changed. We used derive-from-or-self as in RFC9363. We are not sure how to valide it. > Module 'description' stmt > - This is now failing the pyang IETF checks. Please cut/paste and > modify the text output from `pyang --ietf-help` underneath your module > description as there are some precise string matches failing here. Changed the copyright and pyang --ietf is ok. > - For your module description here, you are getting very precise in your > wording here about introducing "a new leaf". This is best left for > revision descriptions otherwise any future edits will require > modification of the module description. Stick w/ the overall > intention of this module which should not change if there are revision > updates. > We added some descriptions to the different element and reference to RFC8724. > Overall 'description' statements > - I see a few were updated but there are still quite a few that remain > that do not use correct capitalization or alignment. Please look at > other published modules for what this entails. You want to be > descriptive and ensure you have consistent alignment (you can adjust > some by running the module through a linter such as pyang) > The description is started with a capital letter and ended it with a dot. Also we pass pyang -f yang --max-line-length=72 to reformat. > Section 5.1 > - You have updated the revision in the module but the filename now > contains the old revision-date (just after CODE BEGINS). Please > adjust this otherwise tools like rfcstrip will produce a file that > conflicts w/ the revision in the module We updated the module name. > > Section 5.2 > - This was still not addressed in -16. This is an incomplete and > incorrect representation of the tree diagram. Please correct this per > RFC8340 (You are still missing the other augmented leaf) We fixed the tree, adding the two leafs. > > Section 7 > - Please follow RFC8407 and include the full security considerations We have added the security consideration (like in RFC9363), with consideration of the new module. > > Section 8 > - You do have IANA considerations. You are introducing a new YANG > module and a new namespace so you have a URI + a module name > registration that needs to be taken care of. See your parent > dependency as an example (RFC9363) > We have modified the IANA Considerations to include the URi and module. We leave blank the reference RFC, because in the examples we found it was the number of current document. > Thx > > /ebben > > On Mar 28 16:15 PM, Sergio Aguilar Romero wrote: >> [External Email. Be cautious of content] >> >> >> Hello, >> >> Thanks for your review. >> >> We have published a new version (-16). >> >> Some comments inline. >> >> Best regards, >> >> Authors Compound ACK draft >> >> >>> On Mar 20, 2023, at 4:57 PM, Ebben Aries via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> wrote: >>> >>> Reviewer: Ebben Aries >>> Review result: On the Right Track >>> >>> 1 module in this draft: >>> - ietf-lpwan-schc-compound-ack@2022-12-02.yang >>> >>> YANG compiler errors or warnings (pyang 2.5.3, yanglint 2.1.55, yangson 1.4.16) >>> - No compiler errors or warnings for tree outputs >>> - Instance data however fails validation (see below) >>> >>> Module ietf-lpwan-schc-compound-ack@2022-12-02.yang >>> - Overall, the module is small (2 leaf augments to ietf-schc) and concise. >>> There are some style nits (alignment/spacing) that can be cleaned up by >>> running the module through a linter and adding back to the draft code blocks >> >> The revision performed to version -14 by Robert Wilton included the pyang output that was copied into version -15. >> >> >>> - As mentioned above, instance data will fail to validate due to the following >>> when stmt >>> >>> when "derived-from(../schc:fragmentation-mode," >>> +" 'schc:fragmentation-mode-ack-on-error')"; >>> >>> Should rather be: >>> >>> when "derived-from-or-self(../schc:fragmentation-mode," + >>> "'schc:fragmentation-mode-ack-on-error')"; >>> - Since you are applying the same when restriction to 2 leaf nodes here, I >>> would recommend grouping the leaf nodes and gating the augment by way of >>> uses + when >>> >>> e.g. >>> >>> augment "/schc:schc/schc:rule/schc:nature/schc:fragmentation" + >>> "/schc:mode/schc:ack-on-error" { >>> description >>> ""; >>> >>> uses ack-on-error { >>> when "derived-from-or-self(./schc:fragmentation-mode, " + >>> "'schc:fragmentation-mode-ack-on-error')"; >>> } >>> } >>> >> >> We have fixed the “+” location. >> >> >> >>> General comments on the draft/modules: >>> - Section 5.2 - It appears that only 1 augment is conveyed here and the Figure >>> 10 line is out of place. This section should conform to RFC8340 and be >>> labeled "Tree Diagram" as seen in other published drafts/RFCs >> >> We have modified Figure 10 label. >> >> >>> - Module contact information - Feel free to include authors as stated in >>> RFC8407 Section 4.8 >> >> One more author was added. >> >>> - Module description - Put the description of the module at the top and the >>> Copyright information beneth with correct line breaks and removal of the >>> asterisk delimeter >> >> Module description was move to the top and asterisk have been removed. When the new version was uploaded, we have a warning saying that the IETF Trust Copyright statement seems to be missing, but it is there. >> >>> - For all description statements in the module, use correct capitilization and >>> be as descriptive as possible without being overly verbose. >> >> Some description was added. >> >>> - Section 7 - Include the full Security Considerations as is in any other >>> drafts/RFCs related to YANG modules vs. point to a related RFC >> >> The draft mentions that same security considerations defined in RFC8724 applied. We added RFC9363 to the security considerations. >> >>> - Section 8 - IANA Considerations. You are introducing a new module that >>> contains a new namespace so will require registering a new URI. This will >>> need to follow the same process and contain the same verbiage as other >>> related drafts/RFCs >>> >> >> We understand that this document has no IANA actions. >> >> >>> Example validated instance data after the when stmt fix: >>> >>> <schc xmlns="urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-schc" >>> xmlns:schc-compound-ack="urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-lpwan-schc-compound-ack"> >>> <rule> >>> <rule-id-value>100</rule-id-value> >>> <rule-id-length>1</rule-id-length> >>> <rule-nature>nature-fragmentation</rule-nature> >>> <fragmentation-mode>fragmentation-mode-ack-on-error</fragmentation-mode> >>> <direction>di-up</direction> >>> <fcn-size>2</fcn-size> >>> <schc-compound-ack:bitmap-format>schc-compound-ack:bitmap-compound-ack</schc-compound-ack:bitmap-format> >>> <schc-compound-ack:last-bitmap-compression>true</schc-compound-ack:last-bitmap-compression> >>> </rule> >>> </schc> >>> >>> { >>> "ietf-schc:schc": { >>> "rule": [ >>> { >>> "rule-id-value": 100, >>> "rule-id-length": 1, >>> "rule-nature": "ietf-schc:nature-fragmentation", >>> "fragmentation-mode": >>> "ietf-schc:fragmentation-mode-ack-on-error", "direction": >>> "ietf-schc:di-up", "fcn-size": 2, >>> "ietf-lpwan-schc-compound-ack:bitmap-format": >>> "ietf-lpwan-schc-compound-ack:bitmap-compound-ack", >>> "ietf-lpwan-schc-compound-ack:last-bitmap-compression": true >>> } >>> ] >>> } >>> } >>> >> >> Great. >> >>> >>
- [lp-wan] Yangdoctors early review of draft-ietf-l… Ebben Aries via Datatracker
- Re: [lp-wan] Yangdoctors early review of draft-ie… Sergio Aguilar Romero
- Re: [lp-wan] Yangdoctors early review of draft-ie… Ebben Aries
- Re: [lp-wan] Yangdoctors early review of draft-ie… Sergio Aguilar Romero
- Re: [lp-wan] Yangdoctors early review of draft-ie… Sergio Aguilar Romero
- Re: [lp-wan] Yangdoctors early review of draft-ie… Ebben Aries
- Re: [lp-wan] Yangdoctors early review of draft-ie… Sergio Aguilar Romero