Re: [MBONED] WGLC for draft-ietf-mboned-dc-deploy and draft-ietf-mboned-deprecate-interdomain-asm

Thanks for the good feedback Lenny.  We will make the suggested changes.

Regards,
Femi
> On 13 Aug 2019, at 20:54, Leonard Giuliano <lenny=40juniper.net@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote:
> 
> 
> <chair hat off, speaking as individual contributor>
> 
> I support publication of draft-ietf-mboned-dc-deploy as this document 
> describes a number of pertinent issues for mcast in a DC environment.
> 
> Some mostly editorial comments below:
> 
> Abstract: "judiciously" misspelled
> 
> Sect 1. Intro, 2nd para: I am confused by the tense used in this para- is 
> it talking about the current situation, or in the future or even the past?  
> If the future, how can an assumption of the future be known to be 
> incorrect in the present?  Don't we need to arrive at that future point to 
> determine how correct this assumption is?  Anyway, suggest sticking to the 
> current state of affairs.
> 
> Sect 2.1, 2nd para: "... there is a consensus..."
> 	-would "expectation" be more appropriate than "consensus"
> 
> Sect 2.2, 1st para: "... overlays mainly simply ..."
> 	-probably just "simply" would be simpler
> 
> Sect 3: "...arguably the intuitive initial course of action for a data 
> center operator..."
> 	-perhaps better to say: "it makes sense for a data center 
> operator..."
> 
> Sect 3.3, 1st para, last sentence: "Thus, PIM must be running..."
> 	-"Thus, a multicast routing protocol (typically PIM) must be 
> running..."
> 
> Sect 4.1: I thought this section was very informative and well-written
> 
> Sect 4.4, 3rd para:  "The
>   deployment envisioned with overlay networks is that the the
>   encapsulation endpoints would be the BFIR."
> 	-suggest something like the following: "The BFIRs are the 
> encapsulation endpoints in the deployment envisioned with overlay 
> networks."
> 
> 
> 
> 
> On Fri, 19 Jul 2019, Leonard Giuliano wrote:
> 
> | 
> | We would like to officially begin working group last call for BOTH
> | draft-ietf-mboned-dc-deploy and draft-ietf-mboned-deprecate-interdomain-asm.
> | Please post whether you support/oppose the advancement of either/both of the
> | drafts as well as any comments you may have to the list by Aug 16.  Also,
> | please note if you are aware of any IPR involved in this drafts (we must hear
> | from the authors about IPR).
> | 
> | Most recent version of the draft can be found here:
> | https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-mboned-dc-deploy/
> | https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-mboned-deprecate-interdomain-asm/
> | 
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