Re: [MIB-DOCTORS] MIB Doctors Last Callforhttp://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-schoenw-snmp-ether-01. txt

Juergen -

Looks good -

Regards,
Tony

At 15:35 21/09/2006, Juergen Schoenwaelder wrote:
>On Mon, Jul 31, 2006 at 01:18:28PM -0400, David Harrington wrote:
>
> > Here are a few editorial nits.
> >
> > 1) in the introduction, it says this document "complements" the
> > standard. I think it would be more accurate to say "supplements". To
> > complement completes something; to supplement completes or adds to
> > something.
>
>changed the word
>
> > 2) This document claims to describe how to send SNMP messages over 802
> > networks, but is actually about sending messages over Ethernet. Should
> > the claim be that the document describes how to send SNMP messages
> > over 802.3 networks? Or does the encapsulation make this 802-generic?
>
>yes, the authors believe that the encapsulation makes it generic
>
> > 3) The introduction includes part of the boilerplate for the
> > Internet-Standard Management Fraeowkr, but calls it the SNMP
> > management framework, which is slightly incorrect.
>
>fixed
>
> > 4) It is considered desirable to have sections that discuss the
> > structure of the MIB module, and the relationship to other MIB
> > modules. I don't know if it justified in this case, but thought I'd
> > point out that they are not present, and when we don't do it, it is
> > harder to justify having others do it.
>
>added a section which explains how the new constant is used
>
> > 5) In the acknowledgements sections, it is a little ambiguous about
> > whether Dan and Bert provided guidance on "this" document or on
> > rfc1089. A new paragraph would make it clearer.
>
>clarified
>
> > 6) The acknowldgements for the RFC editor task (at the end of the
> > document) should probably be updated to refer to IASA rather than
> > ISOC.
>
>this is really under xml2rfc control and outside of my hands ;-)
>
>There was an additional discussion since IANA does not have a registry
>for snmpDomains and I added words to establish such a registry.
>
>The revised document will shortly show up as
><draft-schoenw-snmp-ether-02.txt>.
>
>/js
>
>--
>Juergen Schoenwaelder               International University Bremen
><http://www.eecs.iu-bremen.de/>     P.O. Box 750 561, 28725 Bremen, Germany


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