Re: [mpls] wglc on draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-p2mp-11

Hi Ben,

Thanks for the detailed comments below. See inline.

> Below are my editorial comments on draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-p2mp-11:
> 
> 1) Abstract:
> 
> "These extensions are also referred to as mLDP Multicast LDP"
> 
> Should that be "These extensions are also referred Multicast LDP (mLDP)"?

Changed it to "These extensions are also referred to as	Multicast LDP (mLDP)"

> 2) Section 1 - Introduction:
> 
> Seems to mix root/leaf & ingress/egress. Should probably try and be consistent and pick on set of terms?

It looks correct to me. The term 'leaf' can be seen as a more generic way to describe a leg of a MP-LSP, since when it comes to MP2MP a leaf can be both ingress and egress. Also, root and ingress don't have to be the same when it comes to MP2MP LSPs.

> 3) Section 1 - Introduction:
> 
> The last sentence seems a little strangely worded. Maybe something like "

>  [I-D.ietf-mpls-mp-ldp-reqs], [I-D.ietf-l3vpn-2547bis-mcast] and [RFC4875].
> 
> [Note: I reordered the references as I think the reqs & l3vpn documents are more relevant to this document than P2MP RSVP-TE]

Sounds good.

> 4) 2.4.1.1, para 2 s/amoung/among/

Done.

> 5) 2.4.2 s/The following lists/The following sections list/

Done.

> 6) Section 4.3, bullet 6, 2nd sentence s/Label L MUST/Label Lu MUST/

Done.

> 7) Section 4.3.1.3 bullet 1 s/bases/basis/

Done.

> 8) Section 4.3.1.3 bullet 2 s/build/built/

Done.

> 9) Section 4.4.2 s/The following lists/The following sections list/

Done.

> 10) Section 5 use LFT but it is not expanded anywhere.

Done.

> 11) Section 6.2.1 s/and an additional information/and any additional information/

Done.

> 12) Section 7.1.1 s/LSP label is send to the upstream LSR/LSP label is sent to the upstream LSR/

Done.

> 13) Section 7.1.1 s/installed the context/installed in the context/

Done.

> 14) Section 9.4.3 s/that an other/that another/

Done.

> 15) Section 9.4.4 s/is send to/is sent to/

Done.

> 16) Section 9.4.5 s/are send to/are sent to/

Done.

> 17) Section 15.1
> 
> draft-ietf-mpls-upstream-label-05 is now RFC5331
> 
> draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-upstream-02 is now draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-upstream-08
> 
> draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-capabilities-02 is now RFC5561
> 
> draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-typed-wildcard-07 is now RFC5918

Fixed.

> 
> 
> 18) Section 15.2
> 
> draft-ietf-mpls-mp-ldp-reqs-04 has expired

Has been updated now.

> 
> draft-ietf-l3vpn-2547bis-mcast-06 is now draft-ietf-l3vpn-2547bis-mcast-10
> 
> draft-ietf-mpls-multicast-encaps-09 is now RFC 5332

Fixed.

Thx,

Ice.

> On 9 Nov 2010, at 07:50, Loa Andersson wrote:
> 
>> Working Group,
>> 
>> 
>> this is to start a 2 week+ working group last call on
>> draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-p2mp-11.
>> 
>> Please review the document and send comments to the
>> mpls@ietf.org mailing lsit.
>> 
>> The working group last call ends November 26 - 2010.
>> 
>> /Loa
>> 
>> -- 
>> 
>> 
>> Loa Andersson                         email: loa.andersson@ericsson.com
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