Re: [mpls] wglc on draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-p2mp-11

Loa, Authors,

Below are my editorial comments on draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-p2mp-11:

1) Abstract:

"These extensions are also referred to as mLDP Multicast LDP"

Should that be "These extensions are also referred Multicast LDP (mLDP)"?

2) Section 1 - Introduction:

Seems to mix root/leaf & ingress/egress. Should probably try and be consistent and pick on set of terms?

3) Section 1 - Introduction:

The last sentence seems a little strangely worded. Maybe something like "Related documents that may be of interest include  [I-D.ietf-mpls-mp-ldp-reqs], [I-D.ietf-l3vpn-2547bis-mcast] and [RFC4875].

[Note: I reordered the references as I think the reqs & l3vpn documents are more relevant to this document than P2MP RSVP-TE]

4) 2.4.1.1, para 2 s/amoung/among/

5) 2.4.2 s/The following lists/The following sections list/

6) Section 4.3, bullet 6, 2nd sentence s/Label L MUST/Label Lu MUST/

7) Section 4.3.1.3 bullet 1 s/bases/basis/

8) Section 4.3.1.3 bullet 2 s/build/built/

9) Section 4.4.2 s/The following lists/The following sections list/

10) Section 5 use LFT but it is not expanded anywhere.

11) Section 6.2.1 s/and an additional information/and any additional information/

12) Section 7.1.1 s/LSP label is send to the upstream LSR/LSP label is sent to the upstream LSR/

13) Section 7.1.1 s/installed the context/installed in the context/

14) Section 9.4.3 s/that an other/that another/

15) Section 9.4.4 s/is send to/is sent to/

16) Section 9.4.5 s/are send to/are sent to/

17) Section 15.1

draft-ietf-mpls-upstream-label-05 is now RFC5331

draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-upstream-02 is now draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-upstream-08

draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-capabilities-02 is now RFC5561

draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-typed-wildcard-07 is now RFC5918

18) Section 15.2

draft-ietf-mpls-mp-ldp-reqs-04 has expired

draft-ietf-l3vpn-2547bis-mcast-06 is now draft-ietf-l3vpn-2547bis-mcast-10

draft-ietf-mpls-multicast-encaps-09 is now RFC 5332
On 9 Nov 2010, at 07:50, Loa Andersson wrote:

> Working Group,
> 
> 
> this is to start a 2 week+ working group last call on
> draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-p2mp-11.
> 
> Please review the document and send comments to the
> mpls@ietf.org mailing lsit.
> 
> The working group last call ends November 26 - 2010.
> 
> /Loa
> 
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> 
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