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[mpls] Document shepherd review of draft-ietf-mpls-mna-usecases-10

Tony Li <tony.li@tony.li> Wed, 10 July 2024 00:37 UTC

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[WG chair hat: on]

Hi all,

I have completed the document shepherd review of your document and have found no significant issues.

The document has several editorial issues that could be addressed. While these do not affect the technical status of the document, these would improve its quality and will hasten the process when it gets to the RFC Editor. I’m well aware that developing a technical document in a non-native language is extremely challenging, so I would like to recommend that you enlist the aid of a professional Technical Writer or a native English speaker within your own organizations and ask that they make a full pass through the document for correctness, clarity, and flow. This step is optional.

Regards,
Tony

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