Re: [Netconf] Editorial comments on draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding-05
"Jonathan Hansford" <jonathan@hansfords.net> Wed, 27 June 2018 08:54 UTC
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From: Jonathan Hansford <jonathan@hansfords.net>
To: Qin Wu <bill.wu@huawei.com>, "netconf@ietf.org" <netconf@ietf.org>, "netmod@ietf.org" <netmod@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [Netconf] Editorial comments on draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding-05
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Re Section 4.1, 2nd paragraph, can I suggest the first sentence be reworded along the lines of "Fundamentally, the issue is whether the artwork remains readable once folded." And I would add that sentence to the end of the previous paragraph and start paragraph 2 afterwards. ------ Original Message ------ From: "Qin Wu" <bill.wu@huawei.com> To: "Jonathan Hansford" <jonathan@hansfords.net>; "netconf@ietf.org" <netconf@ietf.org>; "netmod@ietf.org" <netmod@ietf.org> Sent: 27/06/2018 09:09:47 Subject: RE: [Netconf] Editorial comments on draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding-05 >Thanks Jonathan for comments, please see my reply inline below. > > > >发件人: Netconf [mailto:netconf-bounces@ietf.org] 代表 Jonathan Hansford >发送时间: 2018年6月26日 23:46 >收件人:netconf@ietf.org >主题: [Netconf] Editorial comments on >draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding-05 > > > >Hi, > > > >Just a few editorial comments on >draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding-05: > >General:Though there is a header to indicate where the artwork starts, >there is no footer to indicate where it ends. How would a parser know >when to stop? >[Qin]: Good point, if you follows netmod discussion, Martin has similar >suggestion. We need to decide whether we should support fold framing or >extract artwork based on header and footer in this draft. > >Should the header (and footer) be deleted for any artwork that does not >require folding? >[Qin]If we allow the user to specify maximum length limit for each >line, I think header and footer is not needed, > > If we use header and footer to indicate where the line start >and where the line end, header and footer is only needed during artwork >extraction phase. > >Section 4.1: 1st paragraph: A very minor issue, but "e.g." and "etc." >should not be used in the same list. "e.g." is used for a list of >examples and by implication isn't complete, therefore "etc." is already >inferred. > [Qin]: Okay. > >2nd paragraph: Not sure what the 1st sentence is saying. > [Qin] Suppose the artwork is a table, the table >needs to be folded, folding result may look bad. > >2nd sentence: s/susceptible is/susceptible to3rd sentence: s/fair/fairs > [Qin]: Okay, thanks. > >Section 4.2, 3rd paragraph, 1st sentence: repetition of "out" - one of >them needs removingSection 5.2:2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: s/than >then/than the3rd paragraph, 1st sentence: s/be lead/lead > [Qin]: Okay, thanks. > >Section 5.3:2nd paragraph: s/Caluculate/Calculate4th paragraph: >Arguably this should be from bottom-to-top as, going from >top-to-bottom, once you have concatenated two lines the '\' will not be >on the folding-column > [Qin]:In our code, we will delete unneeded ‘\’ line by line >from top to bottom. It think whether from bottom to top or from top to >bottom, it doesn’t matter since it is implementation specific. > >Jonathan > > > ><https://www.avast.com/sig-email?utm_medium=email&utm_source=link&utm_campaign=sig-email&utm_content=emailclient> > >Virus-free. www.avast.com ><https://www.avast.com/sig-email?utm_medium=email&utm_source=link&utm_campaign=sig-email&utm_content=emailclient> > > > --- This email has been checked for viruses by Avast antivirus software. https://www.avast.com/antivirus
- Re: [Netconf] Editorial comments on draft-kwatsen… Qin Wu
- Re: [Netconf] Editorial comments on draft-kwatsen… Qin Wu
- [Netconf] Editorial comments on draft-kwatsen-net… Jonathan Hansford
- Re: [Netconf] Editorial comments on draft-kwatsen… Jonathan Hansford
- Re: [Netconf] [netmod] Editorial comments on draf… Kent Watsen