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[Netconf] Editorial comments on draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding-05

"Jonathan Hansford" <jonathan@hansfords.net> Tue, 26 June 2018 15:45 UTC

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Subject: [Netconf] Editorial comments on draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding-05
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Hi,

Just a few editorial comments on 
draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding-05:
General:Though there is a header to indicate where the artwork starts, 
there is no footer to indicate where it ends. How would a parser know 
when to stop? Should the header (and footer) be deleted for any artwork 
that does not require folding?Section 4.1: 1st paragraph: A very minor 
issue, but "e.g." and "etc." should not be used in the same list. "e.g." 
is used for a list of examples and by implication isn't complete, 
therefore "etc." is already inferred.2nd paragraph: Not sure what the 
1st sentence is saying. 2nd sentence: s/susceptible is/susceptible to3rd 
sentence: s/fair/fairsSection 4.2, 3rd paragraph, 1st sentence: 
repetition of "out" - one of them needs removingSection 5.2:2nd 
paragraph, 1st sentence: s/than then/than the3rd paragraph, 1st 
sentence: s/be lead/leadSection 5.3:2nd paragraph: 
s/Caluculate/Calculate4th paragraph: Arguably this should be from 
bottom-to-top as, going from top-to-bottom, once you have concatenated 
two lines the '\' will not be on the folding-column
Jonathan

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