Re: [netconf] [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-netconf-crypto-types-28

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Hi Dale, all, 

Please see one comment inline. 

Cheers,
Med

> 
> > On Jan 22, 2024, at 17:46, Dale Worley via Datatracker
> <[e-mail]> wrote:
> >
> > Reviewer: Dale Worley
> > Review result: Ready with Nits
> >
> > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
> > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by
> > the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like
> > any other last call comments.
> >
...
> >   Some of the readable data nodes defined in this YANG module may be
> >   considered sensitive or vulnerable in some network environments.
> It
> >   is thus important to control read access (e.g., via get, get-
> config,
> >   or notification) to these data nodes.  These are the subtrees and
> >   data nodes and their sensitivity/vulnerability:
> >
> > The use of "These" in the last sentence does not have an unambiguous
> > referent as I read it.  Perhaps "These subtrees/data nodes have
> these
> > particular sensitivities/vulnerabilities:"  Similar considerations
> > apply to the last sentence of:
> >
> >   Some of the operations in this YANG module may be considered
> >   sensitive or vulnerable in some network environments.  It is thus
> >   important to control access to these operations.  These are the
> >   operations and their sensitivity/vulnerability:
> >
> > [END]
> >

[Med] I created a PR to fix this in the RFC8407bis so that this can be fixed for all future YANG modules, not only this one: https://github.com/boucadair/rfc8407bis/pull/34/files.

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