Re: [OPSAWG] [apps-discuss] APPSDIR review ofdraft-ietf-opsawg-management-stds-05
"Ersue, Mehmet (NSN - DE/Munich)" <mehmet.ersue@nsn.com> Wed, 14 March 2012 10:08 UTC
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Subject: Re: [OPSAWG] [apps-discuss] APPSDIR review ofdraft-ietf-opsawg-management-stds-05
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Dear Lisa, thank you for your kind comments. > I did note that currently active work was not consistently covered. I think it has been already stated in the document that the document aims to give an overview of "existing" standards. Only in a few cases (if it is near to publication) ongoing work has been mentioned. > Organizational: > > Section 3.9 describes ACAP. Either ACAP belongs in the general > purpose protocols (section 2) or another section entirely (perhaps > together with XCAP in a section on application-layer configuration > protocols). In any case, ACAP has been largely superseded by other > work, which would be useful for readers of this document to know. We had in an earlier version a specific section for application layer protocols. The WG decided to resolve this with the aim to get the structure more flat. > Section 3.10 describes XCAP. It is similar to ACAP in the general > scope of its ambition. > > Section 3.2 doesn't seem to fit in Section 3. I understand Section 3 > to be about application-focused network management protocols and > mechanisms, whereas section 3.2 does not describe any specific > protocols or mechanisms, but rather operational guidance. As the title says Section 3 is not about application-focused management protocols. It is about a list of protocols and mechanisms with different focus. I will take care of the nits below as they are particularly important to me. Cheers, Mehmet > Nits (note that generally the document would be much clearer if it had > a good grammatical editorial pass): > > Grammatical error: > "As far as valuable Best Current > Practice (BCP) documents are referenced." > > Grammatical or cut-and-paste error: > - "a management protocol used to convey management information > between the SNMP entities, and management information." > > Grammatical error: > "As such following standards build up the basis of the current SNMP > Management Framework" > > Grammatical error: " Requirements to such a monitoring on the application > level include measuring signaling quality" > > Grammatical error: " YANG allows to express constraints on data > models by means of type > restrictions and XPATH 1.0 [XPATH] expressions." > > > Confusing: "One example SDO using > DIAMETER extensively is 3GPP (e.g. 3GPP 'IP Multimedia Subsystem' > (IMS) uses DIAMETER based interfaces (e.g. Cx) [3GPPIMS])." > -- looks like the Cx is either an error or can be > cut, Cx is not > referred to anywhere else in the document > > Grammatical or typo: " The main goal of this protocol is to configure > and manage access > equipments and allow them to report information" > (plural 'equipments' is not used, fix also elsewhere in doc) > > Grammatical: " The following subsections aim to guide the reader for the fast > selection of the management standard in interest" > > Grammatical: " due to several factors including the rising and > fluctuating energy costs,", extra 'the'
- [OPSAWG] APPSDIR review of draft-ietf-opsawg-mana… Lisa Dusseault
- Re: [OPSAWG] [apps-discuss] APPSDIR review ofdraf… Ersue, Mehmet (NSN - DE/Munich)
- Re: [OPSAWG] [apps-discuss] APPSDIR review ofdraf… Romascanu, Dan (Dan)
- Re: [OPSAWG] [apps-discuss] APPSDIR reviewofdraft… t.petch