Re: [precis] AD Evaluation of draft-ietf-precis-7613bis-07

Peter Saint-Andre <stpeter@stpeter.im> Tue, 13 June 2017 23:07 UTC

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From: Peter Saint-Andre <stpeter@stpeter.im>
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Subject: Re: [precis] AD Evaluation of draft-ietf-precis-7613bis-07
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On 6/13/17 4:07 PM, Ben Campbell wrote:
> Hi,
> 
> This is my AD evaluation of draft-ietf-precis-7613bis-07.
> 
> I think this draft is ready for IETF last call, which I will request
> shortly. I have a few comments, all about references, that I think
> can be handled along with any last call comments.
> 
> Thanks!
> 
> Ben. ———————
> 
> - Should the references to RFC 7613 in the IANA considerations be
> updated to point to this document? (Some _say_ “this document”).

Yes, they should. I actually made that change the other day, along with
cross-references to 7564bis instead of RFC 7564 (etc.)...

https://github.com/stpeter/precis-framework/commit/58e4b072f9838fe4cc454594bff2e6e64daaf73b#diff-3956fe36c870ed54d75e6a05394dd92f

> - There are some citations to RFC 4013 and 3545 that seem to be
> overtaken by events. For example, there is a statement that 4013 is
> obsoleted by this document, when in fact it was obsoleted by 7613.
> Please check to make sure that any such citations (and their
> surrounding context) will still make sense when this draft is
> published as an RFC.

Good catch - we'll clean that up. (The references to the older specs
might be appropriate where we're trying to show the historical
continuity of thinking on these issues, but not when we're talking about
which documents this one obsoletes.)

Peter