RE: Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework
"Prayson Pate" <prayson.pate@overturenetworks.com> Thu, 23 May 2002 12:12 UTC
From: Prayson Pate <prayson.pate@overturenetworks.com>
Subject: RE: Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework
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Mike, Thanks for the input. I agree with your comments except for the minor notes below. Prayson > -----Original Message----- > From: Horn, Mike [mailto:mhorn@virtela.net] > Sent: Wednesday, May 22, 2002 7:36 PM > To: 'prayson.pate@overturenetworks.com' > Cc: 'pwe3@ietf.org' > Subject: FW: [PWE3] Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework > > > Prayson, > > If you are making editorial changes to the framework draft, I > have a few minor recommendations. > > 1) there is inconsistent use of the terms circuits and > services throughout the draft, i would recommend > consolidating to just the term services (which has already > been done is some areas of the draft). some places that could > be changed are listed below. Prayson - I think that this is a good idea. > Abstract - change "emulation of circuits (such as T1, E1, T3, > E3, and SONET/SDH) and services (such as ATM and Frame Relay) > over..." to "emulation of services (such as T1, E1, T3, E3, > Frame Relay, ATM, Ethernet, and SONET/SDH) over..." Prayson - agreed. > 1. Introduction - change "emulation of circuits (such as T1, > E1, T3, E3, and SONET/SDH) and services (such as ATM and > Frame Relay) over..." to "emulation of services (such as T1, > E1, T3, E3, Frame Relay, ATM, Ethernet, and SONET/SDH) over..." Prayson - agreed. > 2.2. PWE3... - change "Emulation allows existing circuits > and/or services to be..." to "Emulation allows existing > services to be..." Prayson - agreed. > 4.7. Traceroute - change "Tracing functionality is desirable > for emulated circuits and services, because..." to "Tracing > functionality is desirable for emulated services, because..." Prayson - agreed. > 2) 1.3. Non-Goals - "EEMD and/or ES." should be "EEMD and/or AS." Prayson - agreed. > 3) 3.6. Architecture Assumptions 2) - change "Interworking > between different PW types and the support of inter-domain > PWs are for further study." to "Interworking between > different PW types and the support of inter-domain PWs > requires further study." Prayson - "for further study" is a stock phrase, and I would like to preserve it. How about: "Support for interworking between different PW types is for further study, as is support of inter-domain PWs." > 4) 3.6. Architecture Assumptions 4) - change "The switched > emulated circuit type (e.g. SVC/SVP) will be for further > study." to "The switched emulated circuit type (e.g. SVC/SVP) > requires further study." Prayson - How about: "Support for switched emulated circuit type (e.g. SVC/SVP) is for further study" > 5) 3.6. Architecture Assumptions 6) - change "Other > encapsulation approaches are for further study." to "Other > encapsulation approaches require further study." Prayson - How about: "Support for other encapsulation approaches is for further study." > 6) 4.2. PW-PDU Sequencing - change "for example, IP is..." to > "For example, IP is..." Prayson - agreed. > 7) 4.6. Statistics - change "These counters would be > contained in a MIB, they should not replicate existing MIB > counters." to "These counters would be contained in a PW > specific MIB, they should not replicate existing MIB counters." Prayson - agreed. > I have some other questions/comments that are not really > editorial, so I will address these in a different email. > > -mike > > > > -----Original Message----- > > > From: Prayson Pate [mailto:prayson.pate@overturenetworks.com] > > > Sent: Friday, May 17, 2002 2:18 PM > > > To: pwe3@ietf.org > > > Subject: [PWE3] Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework > > > > > > > > > Hi, > > > > > > I propose making the following editorial changes to the framework > > > (draft-ietf-pwe3-framework-00) and resubmit as -01. I will > > > also suggest > > > some more structural changes in a separate email. Comments welcome. > > > > > > 1) Change "Inbound" to "PSN Bound" and "Outbound" to "CE Bound" > > > > > > 2) Suggested by Craig White: > > > In section 3.5.2.1.2 "Cell Payload", Change "will need" to > > > "may need" > > > > > > 2) Suggested by Craig White: > > > In section 3.6 "Architecture Assumptions", first item, > > > delete the word > > > "for" from "is for out of scope". > > > > > > 4) Update versions for references: > > > < (draft-bonica-tunneltrace-01.txt), work in progress, > > > < February 2001. > > > --- > > > > (draft-bonica-tunneltrace-02.txt), work in progress, > > > > November 2001. > > > > > > > > > < (draft-ietf-l2tpext-l2tp-base-01.txt) work in > > progress, > > > < October 2001. > > > --- > > > > (draft-ietf-l2tpext-l2tp-base-02.txt) work in > > progress, > > > > March 2002. > > > > > > > > > < Using SMIv2", (draft-zelig-pw-mib-00.txt), work > > > in progress, > > > < July 2001. > > > --- > > > > Using SMIv2", (draft-zelig-pw-mib-02.txt), work > > > in progress, > > > > February 2002. > > > > > > > > > < (draft-nadeau-pw-tc-mib-00.txt), work in > > progress, July > > > < 2001. > > > --- > > > > (draft-nadeau-pw-tc-mib-02.txt), work in > > > progress, February > > > > 2002. > > > > > > > > > < (draft-danenberg-pw-cem-mib-00.txt), work in > > > progress, July > > > < 2001. > > > --- > > > > (draft-danenberg-pw-cem-mib-01.txt), work in progress, > > > > November 2001. > > > > > > > > > < draft-ietf-mpls-lsr-mib-07.txt, work in > > > progress, January > > > < 2001. > > > --- > > > > draft-ietf-mpls-lsr-mib-08.txt, work in > > > progress, January > > > > 2002. > > > > > > > > > < <draft-ietf-mpls-te-mib-05.txt>, work in > > > progress, November > > > < 2000. > > > --- > > > > <draft-ietf-mpls-te-mib-05.txt>, work in > > > progress, January > > > > 2002. > > > > > > > > > Prayson > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > _______________________________________________ > > > pwe3 mailing list > > > pwe3@ietf.org > > > https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/pwe3 > > > > >
- Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework Prayson Pate
- FW: Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework Horn, Mike
- RE: Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework Prayson Pate
- RE: Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework Thomas D. Nadeau