FW: Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework
"Horn, Mike" <mhorn@virtela.net> Wed, 22 May 2002 23:36 UTC
From: "Horn, Mike" <mhorn@virtela.net>
Subject: FW: Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework
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Prayson, If you are making editorial changes to the framework draft, I have a few minor recommendations. 1) there is inconsistent use of the terms circuits and services throughout the draft, i would recommend consolidating to just the term services (which has already been done is some areas of the draft). some places that could be changed are listed below. Abstract - change "emulation of circuits (such as T1, E1, T3, E3, and SONET/SDH) and services (such as ATM and Frame Relay) over..." to "emulation of services (such as T1, E1, T3, E3, Frame Relay, ATM, Ethernet, and SONET/SDH) over..." 1. Introduction - change "emulation of circuits (such as T1, E1, T3, E3, and SONET/SDH) and services (such as ATM and Frame Relay) over..." to "emulation of services (such as T1, E1, T3, E3, Frame Relay, ATM, Ethernet, and SONET/SDH) over..." 2.2. PWE3... - change "Emulation allows existing circuits and/or services to be..." to "Emulation allows existing services to be..." 4.7. Traceroute - change "Tracing functionality is desirable for emulated circuits and services, because..." to "Tracing functionality is desirable for emulated services, because..." 2) 1.3. Non-Goals - "EEMD and/or ES." should be "EEMD and/or AS." 3) 3.6. Architecture Assumptions 2) - change "Interworking between different PW types and the support of inter-domain PWs are for further study." to "Interworking between different PW types and the support of inter-domain PWs requires further study." 4) 3.6. Architecture Assumptions 4) - change "The switched emulated circuit type (e.g. SVC/SVP) will be for further study." to "The switched emulated circuit type (e.g. SVC/SVP) requires further study." 5) 3.6. Architecture Assumptions 6) - change "Other encapsulation approaches are for further study." to "Other encapsulation approaches require further study." 6) 4.2. PW-PDU Sequencing - change "for example, IP is..." to "For example, IP is..." 7) 4.6. Statistics - change "These counters would be contained in a MIB, they should not replicate existing MIB counters." to "These counters would be contained in a PW specific MIB, they should not replicate existing MIB counters." I have some other questions/comments that are not really editorial, so I will address these in a different email. -mike > > -----Original Message----- > > From: Prayson Pate [mailto:prayson.pate@overturenetworks.com] > > Sent: Friday, May 17, 2002 2:18 PM > > To: pwe3@ietf.org > > Subject: [PWE3] Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework > > > > > > Hi, > > > > I propose making the following editorial changes to the framework > > (draft-ietf-pwe3-framework-00) and resubmit as -01. I will > > also suggest > > some more structural changes in a separate email. Comments welcome. > > > > 1) Change "Inbound" to "PSN Bound" and "Outbound" to "CE Bound" > > > > 2) Suggested by Craig White: > > In section 3.5.2.1.2 "Cell Payload", Change "will need" to > > "may need" > > > > 2) Suggested by Craig White: > > In section 3.6 "Architecture Assumptions", first item, > > delete the word > > "for" from "is for out of scope". > > > > 4) Update versions for references: > > < (draft-bonica-tunneltrace-01.txt), work in progress, > > < February 2001. > > --- > > > (draft-bonica-tunneltrace-02.txt), work in progress, > > > November 2001. > > > > > > < (draft-ietf-l2tpext-l2tp-base-01.txt) work in > progress, > > < October 2001. > > --- > > > (draft-ietf-l2tpext-l2tp-base-02.txt) work in > progress, > > > March 2002. > > > > > > < Using SMIv2", (draft-zelig-pw-mib-00.txt), work > > in progress, > > < July 2001. > > --- > > > Using SMIv2", (draft-zelig-pw-mib-02.txt), work > > in progress, > > > February 2002. > > > > > > < (draft-nadeau-pw-tc-mib-00.txt), work in > progress, July > > < 2001. > > --- > > > (draft-nadeau-pw-tc-mib-02.txt), work in > > progress, February > > > 2002. > > > > > > < (draft-danenberg-pw-cem-mib-00.txt), work in > > progress, July > > < 2001. > > --- > > > (draft-danenberg-pw-cem-mib-01.txt), work in progress, > > > November 2001. > > > > > > < draft-ietf-mpls-lsr-mib-07.txt, work in > > progress, January > > < 2001. > > --- > > > draft-ietf-mpls-lsr-mib-08.txt, work in > > progress, January > > > 2002. > > > > > > < <draft-ietf-mpls-te-mib-05.txt>, work in > > progress, November > > < 2000. > > --- > > > <draft-ietf-mpls-te-mib-05.txt>, work in > > progress, January > > > 2002. > > > > > > Prayson > > > > > > > > > > _______________________________________________ > > pwe3 mailing list > > pwe3@ietf.org > > https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/pwe3 > > >
- Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework Prayson Pate
- FW: Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework Horn, Mike
- RE: Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework Prayson Pate
- RE: Proposed Editorial Changes to the Framework Thomas D. Nadeau