Re: Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-quic-applicability-16: (with COMMENT)

Mirja Kuehlewind <mirja.kuehlewind@ericsson.com> Wed, 01 June 2022 18:22 UTC

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From: Mirja Kuehlewind <mirja.kuehlewind@ericsson.com>
To: Lars Eggert <lars@eggert.org>, The IESG <iesg@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-quic-applicability-16: (with COMMENT)
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Hi Lars,

thanks for this. I just realized that I apparently didn't create an PR but directly merged the commit into master. However, I guess that not a problem for these obvious nits. In any case they are addressed!

Mirja



On 19.04.22, 19:24, "Lars Eggert via Datatracker" <noreply@ietf.org> wrote:

    Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for
    draft-ietf-quic-applicability-16: No Objection

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    COMMENT:
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    The datatracker state does not indicate whether the consensus boilerplate
    should be included in this document.

    Thanks to Maria Ines Robles for their General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
    (https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/869_aZXxcQCMeZGDSfN-E1JyjrU)

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    All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
    address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
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    did with these suggestions.

    Section 14, paragraph 1, nit:
    -    QUIC version 1 does not specify a version negotation mechanism in the
    +    QUIC version 1 does not specify a version negotiation mechanism in the
    +                                                   +

    Document references draft-ietf-quic-datagram, but that has been published as
    RFC9221.

    Document references draft-ietf-quic-manageability-15, but -16 is the latest
    available revision.

    Reference [RFC5077] to RFC5077, which was obsoleted by RFC8446 (this may be on
    purpose).

    Paragraph 1938, nit:
    > ols needs to be avoided. In general, a application that implements fallback
    >                                      ^
    Use "an" instead of "a" if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g.
    "an article", "an hour".

    Paragraph 2371, nit:
    > lishment is qualitatively different than one that does not from the point of
    >                                     ^^^^
    Did you mean "different from"? "Different than" is often considered colloquial
    style.

    Paragraph 5804, nit:
    >  opened and closed they are consumed and the cumulative total is incremented
    >                                     ^^^^
    Use a comma before "and" if it connects two independent clauses (unless they
    are closely connected and short).

    Paragraph 5822, nit:
    > increased using the MAX_STREAMS frame but there is no mechanism to reduce lim
    >                                      ^^^^
    Use a comma before "but" if it connects two independent clauses (unless they
    are closely connected and short).

    Paragraph 6727, nit:
    > e an error code space that is independent from QUIC or other applications (s
    >                               ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
    The usual collocation for "independent" is "of", not "from". Did you mean
    "independent of"?

    Paragraph 10802, nit:
    > nd using QUIC. Further, migration to an new address exposes a linkage between
    >                                      ^^
    Use "a" instead of "an" if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound,
    e.g. "a sentence", "a university".