Re: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-bfd-vxlan-12.txt

"Carlos Pignataro (cpignata)" <cpignata@cisco.com> Tue, 26 May 2020 01:15 UTC

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From: "Carlos Pignataro (cpignata)" <cpignata@cisco.com>
To: Greg Mirsky <gregimirsky@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-bfd-vxlan-12.txt
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Thank you, Greg.

I only looked at the update to the last paragraph of Section 6.

Reading through the last paragraph of Section 6, the text is not fully clear. There are a few nits, including a missing article, /as long as/as well as/, /is/are/, and missing preposition which results in an incorrect pointer.

I’d suggest, for your consideration:

OLD:
   Validation of TTL / Hop Limit of the inner IP packet, as long as the
   related considerations for BFD control packet demultiplexing and
   authentication, is performed as described in Section 5 [RFC5881].


OLD:
   Validation of the TTL / Hop Limit field of the inner IP packet, as
   well as the related considerations for BFD control packet
   demultiplexing and authentication, are performed as described in
   Section 5 of [RFC5881].

Best,

Carlos.

> 2020/05/25 午後6:11、Greg Mirsky <gregimirsky@gmail.com>のメールt;のメール:
> 
> Dear Carlos,
> thank you for your comments and suggestions. I hope that the updated version of the draft addresses your comments. Please let me know whether I've captured them all correctly.
> 
> Dear Jeff and Reshad,
> I believe that all action points from the IESG reviews and discussions are reflected in the current version. I much appreciate your consideration and suggestion on the next steps to progress this document.
> 
> Regards,
> Greg
> 
> ---------- Forwarded message ---------
> From: <internet-drafts@ietf.org <mailto:internet-drafts@ietf.org>>
> Date: Mon, May 25, 2020 at 3:00 PM
> Subject: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-bfd-vxlan-12.txt
> To: Sudarsan Paragiri <sudarsan.225@gmail.com <mailto:sudarsan.225@gmail.com>>, Mallik Mudigonda <mmudigon@cisco.com <mailto:mmudigon@cisco.com>>, Greg Mirsky <gregimirsky@gmail.com <mailto:gregimirsky@gmail.com>>, Vengada Prasad Govindan <venggovi@cisco.com <mailto:venggovi@cisco.com>>, Santosh Pallagatti <santosh.pallagatti@gmail.com <mailto:santosh.pallagatti@gmail.com>>
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> 
> A new version of I-D, draft-ietf-bfd-vxlan-12.txt
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> 
> Name:           draft-ietf-bfd-vxlan
> Revision:       12
> Title:          BFD for VXLAN
> Document date:  2020-05-25
> Group:          bfd
> Pages:          11
> URL:            https://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-bfd-vxlan-12.txt <https://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-bfd-vxlan-12.txt>
> Status:         https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-bfd-vxlan/ <https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-bfd-vxlan/>
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> Abstract:
>    This document describes the use of the Bidirectional Forwarding
>    Detection (BFD) protocol in point-to-point Virtual eXtensible Local
>    Area Network (VXLAN) tunnels used to form an overlay network.
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