Fwd: AD review of: draft-ietf-tewg-interas-mpls-te-req-06.txt

Alex Zinin <zinin@psg.com> Wed, 12 May 2004 00:00 UTC

Date: Tue, 11 May 2004 16:35:24 -0700
From: Alex Zinin <zinin@psg.com>
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To: Loa Andersson <loa@pi.se>
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Subject: Fwd: AD review of: draft-ietf-tewg-interas-mpls-te-req-06.txt
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Loa, could you please review this document for the RTG-DIR?

Thanks.

-- 
Alex
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From: Wijnen, Bert (Bert) <bwijnen@lucent.com>
To: "Ed Kern (E-mail)" <ejk@tech.org>,   "Jim Boyle (E-mail)"  <jboyle@pdnets.com>
Cc: "Alex Zinin (E-mail)" <zinin@psg.com>
Date: Tuesday, May 11, 2004, 6:52:23 AM
Subject: AD review of: draft-ietf-tewg-interas-mpls-te-req-06.txt

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WG chairs, as you probably have seen, we are processing this
as an experiment with new process:

   Participant in PROTO Team pilot:
   Workgroup Chair Followup of AD Evaluation Comments
   http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-proto-ad-comments-pilot-01.txt

Supposedly you had been informed/consulted about this by the proto team,
and I assume you are OK with that. If not... pls do speak up (preferably
to the message from proto-team announcing us being part of the experiment).

So here we go with an initial set of comments. I am reading more and I am
asking OPS and RTG directorates for review.

1. ID-nits check:
   $ idnits-v1.24 <drafts/draft-ietf-tewg-interas-mpls-te-req-06.txt
   idnits 1.24, 16 Apr 2004, 07:05

   Line 479 contains non-ascii character in position 29.
   -->    network.  This allows SP1Æs customers connected to SP2 PE router to
                                  ^
   Line 488 contains non-ascii character in position 41.
   -->    TE LSP tail-end router located in SP1Æs network, as shown in the
                                              ^
2. Pls remove section: draft-ietf-tewg-interas-mpls-te-req-06.txt
   This makes no sense once it gets to "Publication requested" stage.

3. The use of RFC2119 language requires a normative ref to that doc.

4. Section 5.1.10.1 seems to require a writable MIB so that inter-AS TE
   tunnels can be configured (created. modified, deleted) via SNMP.
   It is OK with me... but are you sure that that is a hard requirement
   (MUST language is used) ?

5. Sect 5.1.12 and 5.1.13 use "SHOULD not" while I think "SHOULD NOT"
   is intended?

6. Lots of acronyms are used without being expanded the first time thye
   are used. 

7. Sect 6.1 .... MMM.... what does it really mean?
   It is so flexible, that ... oh well ...

8. End of sect 6.2 says:
      Other criteria might be added as this draft will evolve.
   while this draft is now "complete", no?

9. I worry about several normative references to pretty old I-Ds.
   Any outlook that those will indeed be approved at some point in
   time. Maybe several references are pretty old and need updating?   

10. I understand that the doc is written by people for which English
    is probably a second language. But that results in it being tough
    reading. Is there a way to have someone check it for proper
    english and readable sentences?

Thanks,
Bert 

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Fwd: AD review of: draft-ietf-tewg-interas-mpls-t… Alex Zinin
Re: Fwd: AD review of: draft-ietf-tewg-interas-mp… Loa Andersson