Re: [Sidrops] Andrew Alston's Discuss on draft-ietf-sidrops-rpkimaxlen-13: (with DISCUSS)

[Ben Maddison <[e-mail]>]

On 08/11, Ben Maddison wrote:
> Hi Andrew,
> 
> Thanks for the review. Responses in-line...
> 
> On 08/11, Andrew Alston via Datatracker wrote:
> [..]
> > Thanks for the solid work on this document, for the most part, I found it clear
> > and easy to parse.
> > 
> > In Section 1, I see the following:
> > 
> >  Each ROA contains a set of IP prefixes, and an AS number of
> >    an AS authorized to originate all the IP prefixes in the set
> >    [RFC6482].
> > 
> > While I have some idea of what this means - it's confusing and I believe will
> > cause confusion on the part of other readers.  It's confusing to the point
> > where I'm not even sure exactly what the wording should be, but reading that,
> > an AS number of an AS doesn't seem right at all.
> 
> I think this can be slightly improved by:
> 
>     "... *the* AS number of an AS authorized to originate ..."

Actually, perhaps:

    "... the AS number of one of the ASes authorized to originate ..."

... is slightly clearer?

Let me know if that works for you, and I'll add to the queue for
inclusion in -14.

Cheers,

Ben