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Re: [sipcore] [Gen-art] Review of draft-ietf-sipcore-status-unwanted-04

Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Wed, 26 April 2017 17:20 UTC

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From: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>
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Date: Wed, 26 Apr 2017 13:19:58 -0400
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Subject: Re: [sipcore] [Gen-art] Review of draft-ietf-sipcore-status-unwanted-04
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Peter, thanks for your review. Henning, thanks for taking the changes into account. I have ballotted no-objection.

Alissa


> On Mar 21, 2017, at 11:44 PM, Peter Yee <peter@akayla.com> wrote:
> 
> Reviewer: Peter Yee
> Review result: Ready with Nits
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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> Document: draft-ietf-sipcore-status-unwanted-04
> Reviewer: Peter Yee
> Review Date: 2017-03-21
> IETF LC End Date: 2017-03-21
> IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
> 
> Summary: This draft specifies a SIP response code for the callee to
> indicate that the call is unwanted.  It goes to great lengths to
> specify what may be done as a result of sending this response code,
> all the while mandating nothing.
> 
> The document has a couple of nits, but nothing seriously wrong. 
> [Ready with nits]
> 
> Major issues: None
> 
> Minor issues: None
> 
> Nits/editorial comments: 
> 
> Page 4, 1st full paragraph, 2nd sentence: I can't parse this sentence
> as written.  It appears to be a list, but then has a clause (starting
> at "based on") that doesn't fit neatly in the sequence.  Perhaps
> inserting "and" before "based" would help.  Append "as" after "well".
> 
> Page 5, Section 6, 2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: change "extract" to
> "exact".
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