Re: [Teas] I-D Action: draft-ietf-teas-applicability-actn-slicing-05.txt

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Hi Adrian, all,

Please find below some few points (can be addressed as part of the WGLC):

* I would list both the slice and actn frameworks as normative references
* s/ [I-D.ietf-teas-ietf-network-slices] Section 6.2/ Section 6.2 of [I-D.ietf-teas-ietf-network-slices] 
* s/as "isolation" in (Section 7.1 of [I-D.ietf-teas-ietf-network-slices])/ as "isolation" in (Section 8 of [I-D.ietf-teas-ietf-network-slices])
* s/Layer 3 Service Model (L3SM) [RFC8299], Layer 2 Service Model (L2SM) [RFC8466]/ L3VPN Service Model (L3SM) [RFC8299], L2VPN Service Model (L2SM) [RFC8466]
* Shouldn't Section 4.1 or 4.2 mentions that a service mapping for slicing is described in draft-dhody-teas-ietf-network-slice-mapping? Otherwise, we need to explain how the mapping is done. Ideally, an example to illustrate the mapping between the NSSM and VN would be great to have. 
* 
OLD: 
   The YANG model defined in
   [I-D.ietf-teas-ietf-network-slice-nbi-yang] provides a suitable basis
   for requesting, controlling, and deletion, of network slices.

NEW:
    The YANG model defined in
   [I-D.ietf-teas-ietf-network-slice-nbi-yang] provides a suitable basis
   for requesting, controlling, and deletion, of Network Slice Service.
* Please update I-D.ietf-teas-rfc3272bis to RFC 9522.  

Thank you.

Cheers,
Med

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>    Title:   Applicability of Abstraction and Control of Traffic
> Engineered Networks (ACTN) to Network Slicing
>    Authors: Daniel King
>             John Drake
>             Haomian Zheng
>             Adrian Farrel
>    Name:    draft-ietf-teas-applicability-actn-slicing-05.txt
>    Pages:   24
>    Dates:   2024-02-11
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> Abstract:
> 
>    Network abstraction is a technique that can be applied to a network
>    domain to obtain a view of potential connectivity across the
> network
>    by utilizing a set of policies to select network resources.
> 
>    Network slicing is an approach to network operations that builds on
>    the concept of network abstraction to provide programmability,
>    flexibility, and modularity.  It may use techniques such as
> Software
>    Defined Networking (SDN) and Network Function Virtualization (NFV)
> to
>    create multiple logical or virtual networks, each tailored for a
> set
>    of services that share the same set of requirements.
> 
>    Abstraction and Control of Traffic Engineered Networks (ACTN) is
>    described in RFC 8453.  It defines an SDN-based architecture that
>    relies on the concept of network and service abstraction to detach
>    network and service control from the underlying data plane.
> 
>    This document outlines the applicability of ACTN to network slicing
>    in a Traffic Engineered (TE) network that utilizes IETF
> technologies.
>    It also identifies the features of network slicing not currently
>    within the scope of ACTN, and indicates where ACTN might be
> extended.
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