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Re: [Teas] Jim Guichard's No Objection on draft-ietf-teas-rfc3272bis-26: (with COMMENT)

Adrian Farrel <adrian@olddog.co.uk> Mon, 07 August 2023 19:31 UTC

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From: Adrian Farrel <adrian@olddog.co.uk>
To: 'Jim Guichard' <james.n.guichard@futurewei.com>, 'The IESG' <iesg@ietf.org>
Cc: draft-ietf-teas-rfc3272bis@ietf.org, teas-chairs@ietf.org, teas@ietf.org, vishnupavan@gmail.com
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Subject: Re: [Teas] Jim Guichard's No Objection on draft-ietf-teas-rfc3272bis-26: (with COMMENT)
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Hi Jim,

Thanks for reading.

> Thank you to the author and WG for a nicely written document! 
> Just a few minor nits:
>
> - Section 1.4 Terminology: "Egress node:" s/with/which/

Ack

> - Section 1.4 Terminology: "Ingress node:" s/with/which/

Ack

> - Section 5.1.1.1 - expand RSVP on first use which is the 2nd
>  paragraph not the 3rd paragraph.

Ack

> - Section 5.1.1.5 - "The DetNet service sub-layer provides a set of
>  Packet Replication, Elimination, and Ordering Functions (PREOF)
>  functions.." - Remove redundant 'functions' text.

Ack

> - Section 5.1.2.2 - "ACTN facilitates composed, multi-domain
>  connections and provides them to the user.". Should 'composed'
>  be 'composite'?

Hmmm. Mutter.
I think it has been composed into a whole such that it no longer cares that it is composite.
LEAVING THIS TO THE RFC Editor.

> - Section 5.1.3.3 - Expand 'LDP' on first use.

Can do, although https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt

Cheers,
Adrian

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