Re: [Tsv-art] [I2nsf] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-16
"Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong" <jaehoon.paul@gmail.com> Sat, 22 January 2022 13:59 UTC
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From: "Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong" <jaehoon.paul@gmail.com>
Date: Sat, 22 Jan 2022 22:59:01 +0900
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Subject: Re: [Tsv-art] [I2nsf] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-16
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Hi Yoshi, Here is the revision of I2NSF NSF-Facing Interface YANG Data Model Draft: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-17 I attach a revision letter to explain how Patrick and I have addressed your comments. Please read our responses from page 29 in the revision letter. Thanks. Best Regards, Paul On Mon, Nov 22, 2021 at 4:38 PM Yoshifumi Nishida via Datatracker < noreply@ietf.org> wrote: > Reviewer: Yoshifumi Nishida > Review result: Almost Ready > > This document has been reviewed as part of the transport area review team's > ongoing effort to review key IETF documents. These comments were written > primarily for the transport area directors, but are copied to the > document's > authors and WG to allow them to address any issues raised and also to the > IETF > discussion list for information. > > When done at the time of IETF Last Call, the authors should consider this > review as part of the last-call comments they receive. Please always CC > tsv-art@ietf.org if you reply to or forward this review. > > Summary: I think this document is almost ready for publication, but it > will be > better to check the following minor points. > > 1: Page 48 > > We don't need to support header length for TCP while supporting total > length > for UDP? I am wondering if we want to support TCP option type here. > > 2: Page 50: > > list total-length { > key "start end"; > leaf start { > type uint32; > description > "Start udp total length for a range match."; > } > leaf end { > type uint32; > must '. >= ../start' { > error-message > "The end hop limit MUST be equal or greater than > the start hop limit."; > } > description > "End udp total length for a range match."; > } > > -> is this error message correct? > > 3: Page 51 > > leaf-list verification-tag { > type uint32; > description > "The security policy rule according to > udp total length."; > reference > "RFC 4960: Stream Control Transmission Protocol > - Verification Tag"; > } > > -> Is this description correct? > -> In my understanding, verification tag would be random values. > I am wondering how we utilize it. > > 4: Page 52 > > We don't need packet type for DCCP while supporting chunk types for > SCTP? > > 5: Page 70 > > <tcp> > <destination-port-number> > <start>5060</start> > <start>5061</end> > </destination-port-number> > </tcp> > > -> should be "<end>5061</end>" ? > > 6: Page 72 > > <tcp> > <destination-port-number> > <start>80</start> > <end>80</end> > </destination-port> > <destination-port-number> > <start>443</start> > <end>443</end> > </destination-port> > </tcp> > > -> should be "</destination-port-number>" instead of > "</destination-port>" ? > > -- > Yoshi > > > > _______________________________________________ > I2nsf mailing list > I2nsf@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/i2nsf >
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