Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-ipwave-ipv6-over-80211ocb-46
Nabil Benamar <n.benamar@est.umi.ac.ma> Thu, 04 July 2019 20:51 UTC
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From: Nabil Benamar <n.benamar@est.umi.ac.ma>
Date: Thu, 04 Jul 2019 21:50:56 +0100
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Subject: Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-ipwave-ipv6-over-80211ocb-46
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I'm aware of this point. The thing is that I published -47 as a response to Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. At the same time, we received your feedback on -46!! On Thu, Jul 4, 2019 at 9:40 PM Joerg Ott <ott@in.tum.de> wrote: > Just one quick note: I am writing the TSV-ART review. This means that I > am not necessarily on the IPWAVE mailing list, so I am not following > what you are discussing there. It's good to see a new version -47 > having done already some fixed (I got asked to review -46 when the WG > sent this off for last call). > > If you send out an incomplete document (such as -46) for review, you > are wasting people's time because all those reviewers will have to go > through yet another version. This is, simply put, not helpful. > I agree. However, I did send version -47 after the LAST CALL deadline which was 26 June. I did not know that there will be other incoming reviews!! > > So, please, before the next version goes out for a last call, -5x or > something, please make sure that this is in a shape that you could > see published as is. > Thank you for the advice, but why necessairly -5x? > > Jörg > > On 04.07.19 22:31, Nabil Benamar wrote: > > Hi, > > > > Quick answers inline > > > > On Thu, Jul 4, 2019 at 3:42 PM Joerg Ott <ott@in.tum.de > > <mailto:ott@in.tum.de>> wrote: > > > > Hi, > > > > quick responses inline: > > > > > > > > There are no clear transport issues in this document. The main > > > relevant aspect would > > > be MTU size, which is in line with standard IPv6. But the > > document > > > discusses (section 4.2) > > > that all IPv6 packets should be mapped to the same class of > > service. > > > So, there is no > > > service differentiation expected (diffserv, for example)? > > > > > > > > > We have not treated this detail in the current document. > > > > Indeed. But the current document states that *all* IPv6 packets > MUST be > > mapped to the same class of service. You should leave room for > refining > > this in the future since I would expect different traffic classes to > > appear. > > > > > > We have not mentioned the class of service in the current document. We > > have talked about address types. > > > > > > > However, I do not consider the document to be really ready > > because > > > of structure > > > and writing clarity. This is surprising for version -46! > > There is a > > > need for improvement > > > to make the document properly understandable by the reader. I > am > > > actually wondering > > > why this document is sent out for last call given the state > > the text > > > is in. > > > > > > > > > The document will be proofred once again before becoming an RFC. > > > > I am sorry but this is not acceptable. You are asking other people > > to read the document and comment on it. As such, we may certainly > > expect that what we get to review in last call is ready for RFC. > > This document clearly is not. > > > > > > If you see any remaing typos or grmmatical errors, kindly point us to > > the exact lines. > > > > > > > Detailed comments: > > > > > > In several places, the text reminds of patent jargon. Should I > > > worry? There doesn't appear > > > to be any IPR disclosure. > > > > Here, I'd really like to get an explicit response. > > > > > > It is simple. There is no IPR! > > > > > > > p5, 1st line: packet->packets > > > > > > Corrected in -47 > > > > > > > > > > > Are you referring to page 5 or paragraph 5? > > > > Page 5. (Otherwise I would write para 5.) > > > > > > Ok. > > > > > > > The use of RFC 2026 language needs improvement. > > > > > > > > > I didn't get your point. Would you please clarify on how we can > > tackle > > > this issue, if any? > > > > RFC 2026 defines the proper use of MAY, MUST, SHOULD. The document > > does not appear to be consistently using the capitalized words > properly > > in all cases. Just go through the document and check all pieces of > > this normative language. > > > > > > Thank you for the reminder. However, we have already extinsively > > discussed ALL of them in the mailing list. You may check -47. > > > > > > > sect. 4.4: transition time is not defined > > > > The IP-OBUs that are based on embedded platforms can only use the > > former > > > (MAC-based) whereas more powerful platforms (native x86) can use > > > RFC8064.The majority of IP-OBUs are embedded platforms. I'm not > > sure > > > whether they can use RFC8064. > > > > Ahh, this is what you mean by transition time. I assumed that this > > would refer to the time moving from one point of attachment to > another > > or so. Can you say a bit more to make this clear? > > > > > > Yes, I thought you were refering to the length of time during which we > > transition from the use of link-local addresses formed by deriving from > > hardwired 48bit MAC identifiers, to the time where the link-local > > address formed by deriving from more random identifiers (RFC8064). > > Still, I'm not sure if IP-OBUs can use RFC8064! We need to ask in 6man. > > > > > > > > "no generic meaning" -- means what? > > > > > > > > > No generic meaning' - means that the bits in the Interface > > Identifiers > > > are 'opaque'. Earlier, the u/g bits in IID had a significance > > (it meant > > > 'unique/global'). A concept updated by RFC7136. > > > > Great. Then specify opaque -- generic has no meaning this in this > > context. > > > > Ok. I agree. > > > > > > > This section is confusing. Please describe a concrete > sequence of > > > actions. > > > > > > > > > Would you show us how we can improve this section? > > > > Well, this should be up to the WG. Just read it and try to > > understand what it says rather than confirming what you know. > > > > But, in general, as a reader I would expect to get a clear recipe > > with explicit steps. > > > > There are two kinds of identifiers: A and B. If you need A, follow > > these steps: 1., 2., 3., ... If you need B, then ... > > Here is some guidance when A or B is preferred. > > > > Most of this may be in the section but it is hard to extract. > > > > > sect. 4.5: external references for standards are surely the > right > > > way. But > > > the reader may benefit from some informal self-contained > > description. > > > > > > sect. 4.5.2: anythings needs to be said about multicast > > reception? > > > > We have already pointed out that "These issues may be exacerbated in OCB > > mode.A Future improvement to this specification > > > > SHOULD consider solutions for these problems. " > > > > > > > > sect 4.6: Clarify "A subnet may be formed over 802.11-OCB > > interfaces of > > > vehicles that are in close range (not by their in-vehicle > > > interfaces)." further. > > > > > > in close range so that we can consider it's a P2P link. > > > > > > > > sect. 5: explain briefly how certificates are supposed to > > work with > > > variable addresses. > > > > > > App. E: why would high mobility affect encapsulation"? > > > > > > App. G: Ok to show complete packet formats. But then maybe > > also give > > > specific examples? > > > And why do you describe this as capturing what is received > rather > > > than how to construct > > > something to sent out? > > > > > > App. I: reliable multicast used incorrectly > > > "TBD TBD TBD" > > > > Corrected in -47 > > > > > > > > Nits: "mode.A", "; The", "on another hand", "At application > > layer" > > > "attacker can therefore just sit in the near range of > vehicles" > > > "perform attacks without needing to physically break any > wall." > > > "embarking an" > > > "outdoors public environments" > > > "attacker sniffers" > > > "indoor settings" > > > "eventual conflicts" > > > "internet" > > > expand all acronyms, also in the appendices > > > > > > Agreed. I will correct all these Nits. Thank you for pointing this out. > > > > > > > > Why has sect. 5.3 bullets? > > > > > > Ok. We can remove those bullets > > > > > > In short: there is A LOT of work to be done before this is ready. > > > > Jörg > > > > > > > > > > -- > > > > Best Regards > > > > Nabil Benamar > > Associate Professor > > Department of Computer Sciences > > School of Technology > > Moulay Ismail University > > Meknes. Morocco > > > > > > > > _______________________________________________ > > Tsv-art mailing list > > Tsv-art@ietf.org > > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/tsv-art > > > -- Best Regards Nabil Benamar Associate Professor Department of Computer Sciences School of Technology Moulay Ismail University Meknes. Morocco
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- Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ie… Nabil Benamar
- Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ie… Joerg Ott
- Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ie… Nabil Benamar
- Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ie… Joerg Ott
- Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ie… Nabil Benamar
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- Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ie… Nabil Benamar
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- Re: [Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ie… Nabil Benamar
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