Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9561 <draft-ietf-nfsv4-scsi-layout-nvme-07> for your review

["Black, David" <[e-mail]>]

Overall, the RFC Editor has done their usual thorough job of editing.  I found a few small changes that should be made.

Section 3	Security Considerations

First paragraph in text version has a line break in a bad location.

OLD:
   NFSv4.  NFSv4 and RPC security are not directly applicable to the I/
   Os to data servers using NVMe.  Refer to Sections 2.4.6 (Extents Are

NEW:
   NFSv4.  NFSv4 and RPC security are not directly applicable to the I/Os
   to data servers using NVMe.  Refer to Sections 2.4.6 (Extents Are

In general, line breaks should be prohibited in the middle of "I/O" and "I/Os".

Section 5.1	Normative References

Version updates for the three referenced NVMe standards

OLD:
   [NVME-BASE]
              NVM Express, Inc., "NVM Express Base Specification",
              Revision 2.0c, October 2022, <https://nvmexpress.org/wp-
              content/uploads/NVM-Express-Base-Specification-2.0c-
              2022.10.04-Ratified.pdf>.

   [NVME-NVM] NVM Express, Inc., "NVM Express NVM Command Set
              Specification, Revision 1.0c", October 2022,
              <https://nvmexpress.org/wp-content/uploads/NVM-Express-
              NVM-Command-Set-Specification-1.0c-
              2022.10.03-Ratified.pdf>.

   [NVME-TCP] NVM Express, Inc., "NVM Express TCP Transport
              Specification", Revision 1.0c, October 2022,
              <https://nvmexpress.org/wp-content/uploads/NVM-Express-
              TCP-Transport-Specification-1.0c-2022.10.03-Ratified.pdf>.

NEW:
   [NVME-BASE]
              NVM Express, Inc., "NVM Express Base Specification",
              Revision 2.0d, January 2024, <https://nvmexpress.org/wp- 
              content/uploads/NVM-Express-Base-Specification-2.0d-
              2024.01.11-Ratified.pdf>.

   [NVME-NVM] NVM Express, Inc., "NVM Express NVM Command Set
              Specification, Revision 1.0d", December 2023,
              <https://nvmexpress.org/wp-content/uploads/NVM-Express-
              NVM-Command-Set-Specification-1.0d-
              2023.12.28-Ratified.pdf>.

   [NVME-TCP] NVM Express, Inc., "NVM Express TCP Transport
              Specification", Revision 1.0d, December 2023,
              <https://nvmexpress.org/wp-content/uploads/NVM-Express-
              TCP-Transport-Specification-1.0d-2023.12.27-Ratified.pdf>.

Section 5.2	Informative References

Version update for the one referenced NVMe standard

OLD: 
   [NVME-PCIE]
              NVM Express, Inc., "NVMe over PCIe Transport
              Specification", Revision 1.0c, October 2022,
              <https://nvmexpress.org/wp-content/uploads/NVM-Express-
              PCIe-Transport-Specification-1.0c-
              2022.10.03-Ratified.pdf>.

NEW:
   [NVME-PCIE]
              NVM Express, Inc., "NVMe over PCIe Transport
              Specification", Revision 1.0d, December 2023,
              <https://nvmexpress.org/wp-content/uploads/NVM-Express-
              PCIe-Transport-Specification-1.0d-2023.12.27-Ratified.pdf>.

Thanks, --David

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RFC 9561 (draft-ietf-nfsv4-scsi-layout-nvme-07)

Title            : Using the Parallel NFS (pNFS) SCSI Layout to access NVMe storage devices
Author(s)        : C. Hellwig, C. Lever, S. Faibish, D. Black
WG Chair(s)      : Brian Pawlowski, Christopher Inacio
Area Director(s) : Martin Duke, Zaheduzzaman Sarker