Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-aid-workshop-01> for your review
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Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. 1) <!-- [rfced] Please review the guidance for IAB documents <https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/iab-format.txt> and let us know if any changes are needed. a) Consensus is set to “true” in the XML and the datatracker, but the document is missing the “IAB Members at the Time of Approval” section. Please let us know if we may add this section and include the names appearing at <https://www.iab.org/about/iab-members/> (excluding ex-officio members). b) We will remove each author’s affiliation unless we hear objection. c) We will move “Workshop Participants” section to be an appendix as suggested at <https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/iab-format.txt>. 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Original: The IETF, as an international Standards Developing Organization (SDO), hosts a diverse set of data including on the organization's history, development, and current standardization activities, including of Internet protocols and its institutions. Perhaps: The IETF, as an international Standards Developing Organization (SDO), hosts a diverse set of data that includes the organization's history, development, and current standardization activities, which includes Internet protocols and its institutions. --> 5) <!-- [rfced] We have expanded ICT as "information and communication technologies". Please let us know if any corrections are needed. Current: A large portion of this data is publicly available, yet it is underutilized as a tool to inform the work in the IETF or the broader research community focused on topics like Internet governance and trends in information and communication technologies (ICT) standard- setting. --> 6) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.1 includes several links to external documents. For a clearer reference section, may we specify these in an "Informative References" section along with a list of position papers. This would be similar to RFC 8980 and RFC 9075. --> 7) <!-- [rfced] "related to gender questions" is awkward here. Perhaps this could be rephrased as "gender-related information"? Alternatively, perhaps "responses to gender-related questions" would work. Original: These projects could be used to add additional insights to the existing IETF statistics (https://www.arkko.com/tools/docstats.html) page and the datatracker statistics (https://datatracker.ietf.org/stats/), e.g., related to gender questions, however, privacy issues andd implication of making such data publicly available were discussed as well. --> 8) <!-- [rfced] Are you still encouraging discussion to take place on tools-discuss@ietf.org, or should this be changed to past tense? Should a qualifier be added to this sentence, for example, questions or discussion about the datatracker and possible enhancements may be sent to...? Original: Questions or any discussion can be issued to tools-discuss@ietf.org. --> 9) <!-- [rfced] We had trouble parsing this sentence. Please review and let us know how we may clarify. Original: To assess these question it has ben discussed to investigate participant's affiliations including "indirect" affiliation e.g. by funding and changes in affiliation as well as the nessecarity to model company characteristics or stakeholder groups. Perhaps: To assess these questions, investigating participant affiliations, including "indirect" affiliations (e.g., by tracking funding and changes in affiliation) was discussed. The need to model company characteristics or stakeholder groups was also discussed. --> 10) <!-- [rfced] Would "highlighted" or "emphasized" be more clear than "stressed" here? Original: The human element of the community and diversity was stressed, in order to understand the IETF community's diversity it is important to talk to people (beyond text analysis) and in order to ensure inclusivity individual participants must make an effort to, as one participant recounted, tell them their participation is valuable. Current: The human element of the community and diversity was stressed. In order to understand the IETF community's diversity, it is important to talk to people (beyond text analysis). ... --> 11) <!-- [rfced] This document seems to use "draft" generically and to refer to Internet-Drafts in some places. Please review and consider whether the text should refer specifically to Internet-Drafts in some places for clarity. --> 12) <!-- [rfced] Have these questions already been answered or does analysis need to be completed to identify the answers? Original: Answers to these questions come from analysis of IETF emails, RFCs and Internet-Drafts, meeting minutes, recordings, Github data, and external data such as surveys, etc. Perhaps: Analysis of data such as IETF emails, RFCs and Internet-Drafts, meeting minutes, recordings, Github data, and external data (e.g., surveys) may help answer these questions. --> 13) <!-- [rfced] Note that we changed "CO2 emissions" to "carbon emissions" here to match use in the rest of the paragraph. Please let us know if corrections are needed. Original (the whole paragraph is provided for context): Discussion started by considering how sustainable are IETF meetings, focussing on how much CO2 emissions are IETF meetings responsible for and how can we make the IETF more sustainable. Analysis looked at the home locations of participants, meeting locations, and carbon footprint of air travel and remote attendance, to estimate the carbon costs of an IETF meeting. Initial results suggest that the costs of holding multiple in-person IETF meetings per year are likely unsustainable in terms of carbon emission, although the analysis is ongoing. --> 14) <!-- [rfced] This text was difficult to follow. Please consider our suggested text and and let us know if it captures your intended meaning: Original: Discussion also considered to what extent are climate impacts considered in the development and standardization of Internet protocols? It reviewed the text of RFCs and active working group drafts, looking for relevant keywords to highlight the extent to which climate change, energy efficiency, and related topics are considered in the design of Internet protocols, to show the limited extent to which these topics have been considered. Ongoing work is considering meeting minutes and mail archives, to get a fuller picture, but initial results show only limited consideration of these important issues. Current: The extent to which climate impacts are considered during the development and standardization of Internet protocols was discussed. RFCs and Internet-Drafts of active working groups were reviewed for relevant keywords to highlight the extent to which climate change, energy efficiency, and related topics were considered in the design of Internet protocols. This review revealed the limited extent to which these topics have been considered. There is ongoing work to get a fuller picture by reviewing meeting minutes and mail archives as well, but initial results show only limited consideration of these important issues. --> 15) <!-- [rfced] Would it be helpful for readers to include a reference for the IETF gather.town area? Original: All groups had their own work space and could use their own communication methods and channels, or use IETF's gather.town. --> 16) <!-- [rfced] Please confirm that asking participants to "submit groups" is correct, as this reads "asking participants to submit groups to facilitate the formation of groups". Perhaps "groups" could be ommitted? Original: Future workshops that choose to integrate a hackathon could consider to ask participants to submit groups, issues, and questions beforehand (potentially as part of the positions paper or the sign-up process) to facilitate the formation of groups. --> 17) <!-- [rfced] Sections 4.1 - 4.5: While possibly a bit redundant, it may be helpful to the reader to include text to introduce the position papers and subject matter. Please provide text if you would like to make updates. --> 18) <!-- [rfced] Concerning the titles of the two position papers discussed below, please consider whether any updates are desired. a) Don Le's paper originally was named "Position Paper" in the reference. We have updated this to “Article 19” to match what we see at the URL provided. However, perhaps "Analysing IETF Data Position Paper [ARTICLE 19]" as shown in the page info would be more informative? Original: Don Le Position Paper (https://www.iab.org/wp-content/IAB- uploads/2021/11/Le.pdf) b) Mark McFadden's paper is named "Position Paper" in the reference and the paper itself has no title. Perhaps we can use the title provided via page info: IAB Workshop Proposal? Alternatively, perhaps "A position paper by Mark McFadden" would work? 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Thank you for your cooperation, RFC Editor -------------------------------------- RFC9307 (draft-iab-aid-workshop-01) Title : Report from the IAB Workshop on Analyzing IETF Data (AID), 2021 Author(s) : N. Oever, C. Cath, M. Kühlewind, C. Perkins WG Chair(s) : Area Director(s) :
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- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-ai… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-ai… Niels ten Oever
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-ai… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-ai… Niels ten Oever
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-ai… Karen Moore
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