Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-aid-workshop-01> for your review
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-aid-workshop-01> for your review
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Hi all, On 23-08-2022 09:12, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: > Authors, > > While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) > the following questions, which are also in the XML file. > > 1) <!-- [rfced] Please review the guidance for IAB documents > <https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/iab-format.txt> > and let us know if any changes are needed. > > a) Consensus is set to “true” in the XML and the datatracker, but > the document is missing the “IAB Members at the Time of Approval” section. > Please let us know if we may add this section and include the names appearing > at <https://www.iab.org/about/iab-members/> (excluding ex-officio members). > > b) We will remove each author’s affiliation unless we hear objection. > I would prefer to keep mine, unless there is a strong reason not to. > c) We will move “Workshop Participants” section to be an appendix as suggested > at <https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/iab-format.txt>. Should the “Program > Committee” section be treated the same? > Fine with me! > --> > > > 2) <!-- [rfced] Niels, you previously indicated you prefer that your last > name be capitalized in footers as "Ten Oever" but appear as "ten Oever" > wherever preceded by your first name or initial (i.e., document header, > Authors' Addresses) (e.g., RFC 8280). We are unable to follow this guidance > in the current XML. Note that the PDF is the only paginated form. It shows > "ten Oever, et al." in the page footers. > --> > Fine with me! > > 3) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear > in the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> > data science, data anlaysis, data science > > 4) <!-- [rfced] We are having trouble parsing this sentence. Does > "including of Internet protocols..." refer to the standardization activities? > What does "its institutions" mean? > > Original: > The IETF, as an international Standards Developing Organization > (SDO), hosts a diverse set of data including on the organization's > history, development, and current standardization activities, > including of Internet protocols and its institutions. > > Perhaps: > The IETF, as an international Standards Developing Organization > (SDO), hosts a diverse set of data that includes the organization's > history, development, and current standardization activities, which > includes Internet protocols and its institutions. > --> Perhaps: The IETF, as an international Standards Developing Organization (SDO), hosts a diverse set of data that includes the organization's history, development, and current standardization activities, which includes Internet protocols, architecture, and its institutions. > > > 5) <!-- [rfced] We have expanded ICT as "information and communication > technologies". Please let us know if any corrections are needed. > > Current: > A large > portion of this data is publicly available, yet it is underutilized > as a tool to inform the work in the IETF or the broader > research community focused on topics like Internet governance and > trends in information and communication technologies (ICT) standard- > setting. > --> > Excellent > > 6) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.1 includes several links to external documents. > For a clearer reference section, may we specify these in an "Informative > References" section along with a list of position papers. This would be > similar to RFC 8980 and RFC 9075. > --> > Sounds good to me. > > 7) <!-- [rfced] "related to gender questions" is awkward here. Perhaps this > could be rephrased as "gender-related information"? Alternatively, perhaps > "responses to gender-related questions" would work. > gender-related information seems like the best option > Original: > These projects could be used to add > additional insights to the existing IETF statistics > (https://www.arkko.com/tools/docstats.html) page and the datatracker > statistics (https://datatracker.ietf.org/stats/), e.g., related to > gender questions, however, privacy issues andd implication of making > such data publicly available were discussed as well. > --> > s/annd/and > > 8) <!-- [rfced] Are you still encouraging discussion to take place on > tools-discuss@ietf.org, or should this be changed to past tense? > Should a qualifier be added to this sentence, for example, questions > or discussion about the datatracker and possible enhancements may > be sent to...? > > Original: > Questions or any > discussion can be issued to tools-discuss@ietf.org. > --> > questions or discussion about the datatracker and possible enhancements may be sent to tools-discuss@ietf.org, sounds good to me. > > 9) <!-- [rfced] We had trouble parsing this sentence. Please review > and let us know how we may clarify. > > Original: > To assess these question it > has ben discussed to investigate participant's affiliations including > "indirect" affiliation e.g. by funding and changes in affiliation as > well as the nessecarity to model company characteristics or > stakeholder groups. > > Perhaps: > To assess these questions, investigating participant affiliations, > including "indirect" affiliations (e.g., by tracking funding and > changes in affiliation) was discussed. The need to model company > characteristics or stakeholder groups was also discussed. > --> > Agreed with proposal. > > 10) <!-- [rfced] Would "highlighted" or "emphasized" be more clear > than "stressed" here? > > Original: > The human element of the community and diversity was stressed, in > order to understand the IETF community's diversity it is important to > talk to people (beyond text analysis) and in order to ensure > inclusivity individual participants must make an effort to, as one > participant recounted, tell them their participation is valuable. > > Current: > The human element of the community and diversity was stressed. In > order to understand the IETF community's diversity, it is important > to talk to people (beyond text analysis). ... > --> > > s/stressed/highlighted > 11) <!-- [rfced] This document seems to use "draft" generically and to > refer to Internet-Drafts in some places. Please review and consider > whether the text should refer specifically to Internet-Drafts in some > places for clarity. > --> > Agreed > > 12) <!-- [rfced] Have these questions already been answered or does > analysis need to be completed to identify the answers? > > Original: > Answers to these questions come from analysis of IETF emails, RFCs > and Internet-Drafts, meeting minutes, recordings, Github data, and > external data such as surveys, etc. > > Perhaps: > Analysis of data such as IETF emails, RFCs and Internet-Drafts, > meeting minutes, recordings, Github data, and external data (e.g., surveys) > may help answer these questions. > --> > > Agreed with proposal, perhaps add a comma as follows: Analysis of data, such as IETF emails, RFCs and Internet-Drafts, meeting minutes, recordings, Github data, and external data (e.g., surveys) may help answer these questions. > 13) <!-- [rfced] Note that we changed "CO2 emissions" to "carbon emissions" > here to match use in the rest of the paragraph. Please let us know if > corrections are needed. > > Original (the whole paragraph is provided for context): > Discussion started by considering how sustainable are IETF meetings, > focussing on how much CO2 emissions are IETF meetings responsible for > and how can we make the IETF more sustainable. Analysis looked at > the home locations of participants, meeting locations, and carbon > footprint of air travel and remote attendance, to estimate the carbon > costs of an IETF meeting. Initial results suggest that the costs of > holding multiple in-person IETF meetings per year are likely > unsustainable in terms of carbon emission, although the analysis is > ongoing. > --> > I think we should be using the scientifically correct terms (not the colloquial ones), which would be: C02 emissions or carbon dioxide emissions. But we can leave carbon footprint in the text imho. > > 14) <!-- [rfced] This text was difficult to follow. Please consider > our suggested text and and let us know if it captures your intended meaning: > > Original: > Discussion also considered to what extent are climate impacts > considered in the development and standardization of Internet > protocols? It reviewed the text of RFCs and active working group > drafts, looking for relevant keywords to highlight the extent to > which climate change, energy efficiency, and related topics are > considered in the design of Internet protocols, to show the limited > extent to which these topics have been considered. Ongoing work is > considering meeting minutes and mail archives, to get a fuller > picture, but initial results show only limited consideration of these > important issues. > > Current: > The extent to which climate impacts are > considered during the development and standardization of Internet > protocols was discussed. RFCs and Internet-Drafts of active working > groups were reviewed for relevant keywords to highlight the extent to > which climate change, energy efficiency, and related topics were > considered in the design of Internet protocols. This review revealed > the limited extent to which these topics have been considered. There > is ongoing work to get a fuller picture by reviewing meeting minutes > and mail archives as well, but initial results show only limited > consideration of these important issues. > --> > > Agreed with the proposal. > 15) <!-- [rfced] Would it be helpful for readers to include a reference > for the IETF gather.town area? > > Original: > All groups had their own work space and > could use their own communication methods and channels, or use IETF's > gather.town. > --> > Agreed. > > 16) <!-- [rfced] Please confirm that asking participants to "submit groups" > is correct, as this reads "asking participants to submit groups to facilitate > the formation of groups". Perhaps "groups" could be ommitted? > > Original: > Future workshops that choose to integrate a hackathon could consider > to ask participants to submit groups, issues, and questions > beforehand (potentially as part of the positions paper or the sign-up > process) to facilitate the formation of groups. > --> > Agreed, so it would be as follows: Future workshops that choose to integrate a hackathon could consider to ask participants to submit issues, and questions beforehand (potentially as part of the positions paper or the sign-up process) to facilitate the formation of groups. > > 17) <!-- [rfced] Sections 4.1 - 4.5: While possibly a bit redundant, it may be > helpful to the reader to include text to introduce the position papers and > subject matter. Please provide text if you would like to make updates. > --> > Not necessary imho > > 18) <!-- [rfced] Concerning the titles of the two position papers discussed below, please consider whether any updates are desired. > > a) Don Le's paper originally was named "Position Paper" in the reference. > We have updated this to “Article 19” to match what we see at the URL provided. > However, perhaps "Analysing IETF Data Position Paper [ARTICLE 19]" as shown in > the page info would be more informative? > Original: > Don Le Position Paper (https://www.iab.org/wp-content/IAB- > uploads/2021/11/Le.pdf) > > Agreed with proposed title ("Analysing IETF Data Position Paper [ARTICLE 19]") > b) Mark McFadden's paper is named "Position Paper" in the reference and the > paper itself has no title. Perhaps we can use the title provided via > page info: IAB Workshop Proposal? Alternatively, perhaps "A position paper by Mark McFadden" would work?> > Original: > Mark McFadden Position Paper (https://www.iab.org/wp-content/IAB- > uploads/2021/11/McFadden.pdf) > --> > Agreed with: "A position paper by Mark McFadden" > > 19) <!-- [rfced] Note that the Acknowledgements section was updated > so that two paragraphs about support for Niels ten Oever appear > closer together. > --> > I think the last paragraph should mention Colin Perkins: Efforts in the organization of this workshop by Colin Perkins were supported in part by the UK Engineering and Physical Sciences Research Council under grant EP/S036075/1. > > 20) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online > Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> > and let us know if any changes are needed. Note that our script did not > flag any words or phrases of concern. --> > Thanks - nothing found. 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Oever, C. Cath, M. Kühlewind, C. Perkins > WG Chair(s) : > Area Director(s) : > > -- Niels ten Oever, PhD Postdoctoral Researcher - Media Studies Department - University of Amsterdam Affiliated Faculty - Digital Democracy Institute - Simon Fraser University Non-Resident Fellow 2022-2023 - Center for Democracy & Technology Associated Scholar - Centro de Tecnologia e Sociedade - Fundação Getúlio Vargas Research Fellow - Centre for Internet and Human Rights - European University Viadrina Vice chair - Global Internet Governance Academic Network (GigaNet) W: https://nielstenoever.net E: mail@nielstenoever.net T: @nielstenoever P/S/WA: +31629051853 PGP: 2458 0B70 5C4A FD8A 9488 643A 0ED8 3F3A 468A C8B3 Read my latest article on understanding power in standardization in the Journal of Standardisation here: https://journals.open.tudelft.nl/jos/article/view/6205/5361
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- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-ai… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-ai… Niels ten Oever
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-ai… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-ai… Niels ten Oever
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-ai… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-iab-ai… Niels ten Oever
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Mirja Kuehlewind
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Corinne Cath
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Niels ten Oever
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Niels ten Oever
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Colin Perkins
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Mirja Kuehlewind
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Corinne Cath
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Mirja Kuehlewind
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Colin Perkins
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Mirja Kuehlewind
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Colin Perkins
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Karen Moore
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Niels ten Oever
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Colin Perkins
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Niels ten Oever
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Colin Perkins
- Re: [auth48] [IAB] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9307 <draft-… Sandy Ginoza