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From: "Rabadan, Jorge (Nokia - US/Mountain View)" <jorge.rabadan@nokia.com>
To: "Bocci, Matthew (Nokia - GB)" <matthew.bocci@nokia.com>, "draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd@ietf.org" <draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [bess] Documents shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-06
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Hi Matthew,

Weird, RFC7432 is in fact used multiple times. 
Could it be just that we shouldn't have the space between "RFC" and "7432"? 

Old:

[RFC7432]  Sajassi, A., Ed., Aggarwal, R., Bitar, N., Isaac, A.,
   Uttaro, J., Drake, J., and W. Henderickx, "BGP MPLS-Based Ethernet
   VPN", RFC 7432, DOI 10.17487/RFC7432, February 2015,
   <https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc7432>.

New:

[RFC7432]  Sajassi, A., Ed., Aggarwal, R., Bitar, N., Isaac, A.,
   Uttaro, J., Drake, J., and W. Henderickx, "BGP MPLS-Based Ethernet
   VPN", RFC7432, DOI 10.17487/RFC7432, February 2015,
   <https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc7432>.


Let us know if you want us to republish with just that change.

Thanks.
Jorge

-----Original Message-----
From: "Bocci, Matthew (Nokia - GB)" <matthew.bocci@nokia.com>
Date: Monday, July 8, 2019 at 6:05 PM
To: "Rabadan, Jorge (Nokia - US/Mountain View)" <jorge.rabadan@nokia.com>, "draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd@ietf.org" <draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd@ietf.org>
Cc: "bess@ietf.org" <bess@ietf.org>
Subject: Re: Documents shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-06

    Hi Jorge
    
    Thanks. Please can you double-check the reference to RFC 7342? It appears in your list of normative references, but does not seem to be used in the text.
    
    Regards
    
    Matthew
    
    On 08/07/2019, 09:50, "Rabadan, Jorge (Nokia - US/Mountain View)" <jorge.rabadan@nokia.com> wrote:
    
        Hi Matthew,
        
        We submitted version 07, which addresses your comments.
        Thank you very much for reviewing.
        
        Jorge
        
        -----Original Message-----
        From: "Bocci, Matthew (Nokia - GB)" <matthew.bocci@nokia.com>
        Date: Monday, July 1, 2019 at 2:20 PM
        To: "draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd@ietf.org" <draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd@ietf.org>
        Cc: "bess@ietf.org" <bess@ietf.org>
        Subject: Documents shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-06
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        Resent-To: <jorge.rabadan@nokia.com>, <senthil.sathappan@nokia.com>, <kiran.nagaraj@nokia.com>, <wim.henderickx@nokia.com>, <greg.hankins@nokia.com>, <thomas.king@de-cix.net>, <daniel.melzer@de-cix.net>, <nordmark@sonic.net>
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            Authors
            
            I am the document shepherd for this draft. Please see below for my comments. Please treat these as you would any other WG last call comments.
            
            Please address these before I submit the document to the IESG for publication.
            
            Best regards
            
            Matthew
            
            General:
            The draft is well written and generally good to go. I have just a few minor comments.
            
            Number of Co-Authors: There are 8 co-authors listed in the document header. Generally, the RFC editor expects this to be limited to 5. Please can you reduce the number, e.g. by moving the less active authors to a major contributors section in the draft.
            
            RFC2119 language: There are a couple of cases where you may have intended to capitalise certain keywords. For example, in section 4.4 you write 'recommended' when perhaps 'RECOMMENDED' was intended, and 'not recommended' where 'NOT RECOMMENDED' might be more appropriate. Please go thorough and double-check.
            
            Thanks
            
            Matthew

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