[bess] Genart early review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb-18

[Mallory Knodel via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Reviewer: Mallory Knodel
Review result: Ready with Issues

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Document: draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb
Reviewer: Mallory Knodel
Review Date: 16 Nov 2023

Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that
should be fixed before publication.

Major issues: Section 3 as the Solution Overview seems out of step with the
remaining sections in that it properly describes the relationships between 4, 5
and 6, but it appears that 7-10 are additional over arching considerations that
might benefit from being extracted from the discussion of direct solutions.
Suggesting perhaps that 4, 5 and 6 be treated under the solution space, whereas
the remaining substantive sections 7-10 be presented as additional
considerations and tradeoffs but not direct descriptions of full solutions to
the problems outlined in the introduction.

Minor issues: Not all acronyms are properly expanded in order of their
first-time use which hinders readability. Seems 12. Operational Considerations
is superfluous and plenty of document dependencies also do not have this
section.

Nits/editorial comments: The focus of my review did not expose any
nits/editorial comments though I believe there are some that have persisted
across the various versions that I compared and I would encourage the authors
to do a full copy edit ahead of IESG submission.