RE: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents
"Wijnen, Bert (Bert)" <bwijnen@lucent.com> Mon, 26 August 2002 21:15 UTC
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From: "Wijnen, Bert (Bert)" <bwijnen@lucent.com>
To: Lou Berger <lberger@movaz.com>
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Subject: RE: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents
Date: Mon, 26 Aug 2002 23:15:32 +0200
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Thank you... some comments inline > -----Original Message----- > From: Lou Berger [mailto:lberger@movaz.com] > Sent: maandag 26 augustus 2002 21:50 > To: Wijnen, Bert (Bert) > Cc: Ccamp-wg (E-mail) > Subject: Re: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents > > > Bert, > A preview of the updates has been distributed to the > co-contributors. I'll submit the updates on Wednesday AM. Detailed > responses are in-line below. > > Lou > > At 11:35 AM 8/12/2002, Wijnen, Bert (Bert) wrote: > > >The IESG did review/discuss these documents recently: > > > >o Generalized MPLS - Signaling Functional Description > > <draft-ietf-mpls-generalized-signaling-08.txt> > >o Generalized MPLS Signaling - CR-LDP Extensions' > > <draft-ietf-mpls-generalized-cr-ldp-06.txt> > >o Generalized MPLS Signaling - RSVP-TE Extensions > > <draft-ietf-mpls-generalized-rsvp-te-07.txt> > > > >As a result I as the responsible AD must hand them back > >to the editors/authors/wg. Here are the issues/concerns. > > > >general issues, for all 3 documents: > > > >1. All 3 documents still have some 15 or so people on the front > > page. I have pushed back on this several times, in the end > > I did go along (against my knowing better) and issued IETF > > Last Call and put them on the IESG agenda. But I had warned > > that you would most probably get push back from IESG again. > > You now have a firm (IESG) rejection. > > > > The docs will not be considered again unless you comply > > with the guidelines in section "Author overload" in > > > ><http://www.rfc-editor.org/policy.html>http://www.rfc-editor. > org/policy.html > > all but editor(s) removed from front page, also reformatted to match > draft-rfc-editor-rfc2223bis-02.txt. > > >2. The titles/abstracts have too many acronyms that have not > > been expaned/explained. See also the "Choosing titles" and > > "abstract" sections in > > > ><http://www.rfc-editor.org/policy.html>http://www.rfc-editor. > org/policy.html > > I believe that the RFC-Editor wants these acronyms expanded: > > SONET/SDH, ADM, CR-LDP, RSVP, RSVP-TE > > Done. > > >3. We need an IPR section according to RFC2026, sect 10.4 > > probably statements (A) and (B). > >( > > Added. > > >4. I found that in some documents you use SONET/SDH while > > in others you use SDH/SONET and yet in other you use > > bother forms. Is there maybe one "best form" and if so > > can we stick to that. I just bring this up since you > > need to go through an editing cycle anyway. > > SONET/SDH is now used. One location was changed. > > >Comments per document: > > > ><draft-ietf-mpls-generalized-signaling-08.txt> > > > >1. References must be split in normative and informative > > I had mentioned this before! > > Done. > > >2. IANA considerations is insufficient. I had mentioned this before! > > You must specify: > > - which namespace(s) you want the IANA to start administering > > - the rules/guidelines to be used when IANA must make > > new assignments/registrations in such namespace(s) > > (this probably will result in a reference to RFC2434) > > - you must list which assignments IANA needs to register right > > away from the start (as specified in this document). That is, > > do not make it an IANA task to try to figure out which pieces > > make up which namespace and which exact assignments need to > > be made. > > done. > > > >3. You are using MUST and SHOULD language and such. > > Seems you need to add something about that in the intro > > and add a reference to RFC2119 (as you also do in the > > other 2 documents) > > done. > > >4. last para of sect 1, you use [LDP, CR-LDP, RSVP-TE] as > > a reference, but those are not listed in ref section. > > although some of them are listed as [RFCxxxx] in the ref > > section. May want to get that in sync. > > done. > > >5. From section 3.1.1 (last para) I get the impressing that > > [GMPLS-RTG] is a normative reference. What is the status > > of that document? > > The reference was broken (no values in document GMPLS-RTG). > Values are now explicitly listed. > > >6. From section 9.1.1 towards the end, I get the impression > > that [MPLS-UNNUM] is normative too? Status? > > one reference has been removed, the other is still there. I think > informative is accurate for the new text. > Will check when I see the text > >some less serious, but now that you are at it anyway... > > > >7. Intro lists 4 types of interfaces (PSC, TDM, LSC, PSC) > > Architecture doc (still and I-D) lists L2SC as well. > > Would it not be better if they are in sync? > > L2SC is really a sub/special-case of PSC. Other documents also don't > explicitly call it out. > The Architecture doc DOES spell it out. When I read "Architecture" then I always think it is gudining any other documents in that space. > >8. sect 3.2.1 and sect 6.1 > > would it make sense to change > > Label: Variable > > into something like > > Label: Variable number of bit > > or > > Label: variable length > > sure, why not... > > >9. Sect 9.1 1st sentence > > s/there as an/there is an/ > > thanks. > > >10. Sect 9.2 2nd sentence > > s/failure the limits/failure that limits/ > > thanks. > > >12. LSP is not defined before use. > > Fixed. > > > > > > >13. the document could have been 5 pages shorter if it had not > > bothered to explain how it is different from "old" MPLS, > > and just concentrated on what it was doing. > > I guess a ptr to the old MPLS doc would have been sufficient? > > I think we should just keep this as is. > So you are asking me to defend that in the IESG. Not sure how successfull I will be. Up to you to take the risk > >14. Cannot implement section 9 (interface identification) - the > > info on which end's interfaces are being talked about, and > > how one end identifies which of its interfaces match > > corresponding interfaces at the other end simply doesn't > > seem to be there. > > (generalized-rsvp-te specifies that the downstream interface > > is sent in a PATH message.....this is a matchup, but not sure > > which way it matches). > > The whole document can only be implemented when combined with > one of the protocol specific documents. I think the 21 responses > to the implementation survey speaks for itself. (Also, this > document does clearly states: "In all cases the choice of the data > interface is indicated by the upstream node using addresses and > identifiers used by the upstream node.") > So maybe adding a note to it to explain that might alleviate the concern. Of course I can try to defend based on the 21 responses, that is indeed a strong point. But often adding a one or wto line explanation helps to fuse the push back > > >15. In the ref section you have: > > [RECOVERY] Sharma, et al "A Framework for MPLS-based Recovery," > > draft-ieft-mpls-recovery-frmwrk-02.txt, March, 2001 > > But it is never referenced! > > dropped! > > ><draft-ietf-mpls-generalized-cr-ldp-06.txt> > > > >1. IANA asks: > > Seems OK but which registry should these assignments > > be going in. > > So please specify. > > Took me a second to figure out what was needed here, the > reference was > broken (said 3031 not 3036.) With a proper reference, the registry > (http://www.iana.org/assignments/ldp-namespaces) should be clear. > I would strongly recommend to also add that web ptr. It will Help IANA a lot, and it will just smooth the further processing of the document. It also helps later readers to quickly find the place where values are registered. > >2. [RFC2119] reference is used, but it is not listed in Ref section > > okay. > Means that you have added it I assume ;-) > >3. you have a ref to [MPLS-TE] but it is not listed > > in ref section. > > broken reference removed, and text fixed. > > > >4. IANA Considerations starts with: > > This draft uses the LDP [RFC 3031] name spaces, which require > > assignment for the following TLVs. > > Do you mean to reference 3036 instead of 3031? > > > > yes. same issue as comment 1. > same as above. pls add the web ptr to the registry > >5. Since LDP spec (RFC3036) has statement D of sect 10 of rfc2026 > > in its IPR section, maybe that applies to this spec too? > > I'm not aware of such claims with respect to this draft so I > cannot make this statement. Has the IESG been notified of > such a claim? > I was just asking if you are aware. I am not aware of it. I would think that you as authors might know better than I cause you work daily in this space. > ><draft-ietf-mpls-generalized-rsvp-te-07.txt> > > > >1. This doc says "just use IPsec". A clearer statement is needed, > > specifying the necessary IPsec selectors (per RFC 2401) and the > > way the cryptographically protected endpoints are related to > > the authorization model, i.e., who can do what. > > can you provide an example of what you'd like to see? > I am checking with Security ADs. > >2. I wonder if Sect 5 actually tells us that this doc is "updating > > RFC3209" cause you are "revising" the definitions. > > now says "...is being extended..." > Well, that is nice playing with words. I think you understand my real question. But... since it gets registered by IANA (if I understand it correctly) I guess this is OK, cause IANA will register the RFC in the registry so that people can find this. > >3. Section 4.3 has ref to [RSVP]. That is not in ref section., > > I guess you mean [RFC2205] > > yes. I assume you meaning you updated it. > > >4. In sect 8.1.2 you have a ref to [MPLS-TE] but it is not listed > > in ref section. > > removed and text updated. (was a broken reference) > > >less serious but since you are at it anyway... > > > >5. Once you start reading section 2. how do you know that these > > are "RSVP objects" ?? I guess it is implicit. > > yes. > Still I wonder if some words are needed... or might make that clearer for the novice reader. > > Although in sect 2.1.2 you talk about "Int-serv objects" > > Here you may want to add a reference to the doc that > > describes the "Peak Data Rate field of the Int-serv objects" > > sure... > > >6. Why does LDP need to be mentioned in this doc at all? > > removed. > > >Bert > Thanks, Bert
- RE: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents Wijnen, Bert (Bert)
- RE: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents Lou Berger
- RE: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents Kireeti Kompella
- RE: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents Lou Berger
- RE: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents Wijnen, Bert (Bert)
- RE: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents Lou Berger
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- RE: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents Lou Berger
- RE: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents Wijnen, Bert (Bert)
- Re: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents Lou Berger
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- RE: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents Lou Berger
- RE: IESG comments on generalize MPLS documents Lou Berger
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