[CDNi] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-cdni-uri-signing-24: (with COMMENT)

[Lars Eggert via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-cdni-uri-signing-24: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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Thanks to Christer Holmberg for their General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
(https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/ppG3onLlgjXu_hULqu3LVQPq0iY).

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All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

Section 1.2. , paragraph 3, nit:
> e way in the initial steps #1 and #2 but the later steps involve multiple CD
>                                     ^^^^
Use a comma before "but" if it connects two independent clauses (unless they
are closely connected and short).

Section 2. , paragraph 2, nit:
> gistry claim name is specified in parenthesis below) are used to enforce the
>                                ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Did you mean "in parentheses"? "parenthesis" is the singular.

Section 2.1. , paragraph 6, nit:
>  If the received signed JWT contains a Expiry Time claim, then any JWT subse
>                                      ^
Use "an" instead of "a" if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g.
"an article", "an hour".

Section 2.1.7. , paragraph 2, nit:
> rejected if sourced from a client outside of the specified IP range. Since th
>                                   ^^^^^^^^^^
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "outside".

Section 2.1.8. , paragraph 2, nit:
> , and mobile clients switching from WiFi to Cellular networks where the clie
>                                     ^^^^
Did you mean "Wi-Fi"? (This is the officially approved term by the Wi-Fi
Alliance.).

Section 2.1.15. , paragraph 4, nit:
> ed URIs would require to be valid for a at least 30 minutes, thereby reducing
>                                       ^
Use "an" instead of "a" if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g.
"an article", "an hour".

Section 2.1.15.2. , paragraph 6, nit:
> s generated, the model is not broken and the User Agent can successfully ret
>                                     ^^^^
Use a comma before "and" if it connects two independent clauses (unless they
are closely connected and short).

Section 3.3. , paragraph 2, nit:
> orm verification, regardless of whether or not the URI is signed. Type: Bool
>                                 ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Consider shortening this phrase to just "whether". It is correct though if you
mean "regardless of whether".

These URLs in the document can probably be converted to HTTPS:
 * http://www.iso.org/standard/65274.html
 * http://www.iana.org/assignments/jwt
 * http://pubs.opengroup.org/onlinepubs/9699919799/