Re: [Detnet] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-tsn-vpn-over-mpls-05

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Subject: Re: [Detnet] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-tsn-vpn-over-mpls-05
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Hi Vijay,
Many thanks for your review.
I will fix your nits in the next version. (See inline)
Thanks
Bala'zs

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Subject: [Detnet] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-tsn-vpn-over-mpls-05

Reviewer: Vijay Gurbani
Review result: Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-detnet-tsn-vpn-over-mpls-05
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: 2021-01-29
IETF LC End Date: 2021-02-05
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: Ready to be published as a Proposed Standard. 

Generally, the I-D is quite heavy on acronyms, some of which I suspect comes with the domain the I-D targets.  While I suspect that most readers versed in the area will not have any problems expanding the acronyms, I just wanted to mention this for the authors to perhaps do a once-over to see if any acronyms need expansion.  (I list a couple in the Nits section.)

Major issues:  0

Minor issues:  0

Nits/editorial comments: 2

- Figure 2: - What is "Tnl"? (Tunnel?)
            - What does "AC" mean?

<Balazs> Thanks. Yes Tnl means Tunnel and AC means Attachment Circuit.
I will update the figure.

- IDnits is reporting a couple of unused references ([RFC5921] and
  [RFC8660]), and that draft-ietf-detnet-mpls has been published as
  RFC 8964.

<Balazs> Ack. Thanks.

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