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Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-6man-predictable-fragment-id-09

Fernando Gont <fernando@gont.com.ar> Thu, 01 October 2015 22:36 UTC

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Hi, Meral,

Thanks so much for your feedback! -- Please find my comments in-line...

On 09/09/2015 01:44 PM, Meral Shirazipour wrote:
> Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Informational RFC,
> but I have some editorial comments.
> 
> Major issues:
> 
> Minor issues:
> 
> Nits/editorial comments: -[Page 6] line 7, "the the
> Identification"--extra 'the'-->"the Identification" -[Page 15],
> Appendix A., "the the algorithm specified"-extra 'the'-->"the
> algorithm specified" -[Page 16], "(assumming the"--->"(assuming the" 

Will fix all these.


> -[Page 16], would be useful to have figure captions if the message
> exchanges are figures as referred to in the text.

Will give it  try... But I'm not sure a short caption could be of any
use, since describing what the figure is about would be reather complex
in a single-liner... But I will give it a try.



> -General, please
> spell out acronyms at first use, e.g. PRNG, DoS etc.

Will do.

Thanks!

Best regards,
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Fernando Gont
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