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Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-6man-predictable-fragment-id-09

Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Thu, 01 October 2015 22:52 UTC

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From: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
To: Fernando Gont <fernando@gont.com.ar>, "draft-ietf-6man-predictable-fragment-id.all@tools.ietf.org" <draft-ietf-6man-predictable-fragment-id.all@tools.ietf.org>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Hi,
  Thank you.

Best,
Meral

> -----Original Message-----
> From: Fernando Gont [mailto:fernando@gont.com.ar]
> Sent: Thursday, October 01, 2015 3:34 PM
> To: Meral Shirazipour; draft-ietf-6man-predictable-fragment-
> id.all@tools.ietf.org; gen-art@ietf.org
> Subject: Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-6man-predictable-fragment-
> id-09
> 
> Hi, Meral,
> 
> Thanks so much for your feedback! -- Please find my comments in-line...
> 
> On 09/09/2015 01:44 PM, Meral Shirazipour wrote:
> > Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Informational RFC, but
> > I have some editorial comments.
> >
> > Major issues:
> >
> > Minor issues:
> >
> > Nits/editorial comments: -[Page 6] line 7, "the the
> > Identification"--extra 'the'-->"the Identification" -[Page 15],
> > Appendix A., "the the algorithm specified"-extra 'the'-->"the
> > algorithm specified" -[Page 16], "(assumming the"--->"(assuming the"
> 
> Will fix all these.
> 
> 
> > -[Page 16], would be useful to have figure captions if the message
> > exchanges are figures as referred to in the text.
> 
> Will give it  try... But I'm not sure a short caption could be of any use, since
> describing what the figure is about would be reather complex in a single-liner...
> But I will give it a try.
> 
> 
> 
> > -General, please
> > spell out acronyms at first use, e.g. PRNG, DoS etc.
> 
> Will do.
> 
> Thanks!
> 
> Best regards,
> --
> Fernando Gont
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