Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-rserpool-threats-09

Hi Maureen,

This version (which as far as I can tell has not yet been submitted)  
addresses all of my substantive comments.

It does, however introduce some new typos and other purely editorial  
issues. I would now consider it "ready with nits" from a gen-art  
review perspective.

Section 1.0:

The last paragraph in the section now seems redundant given the new  
paragraph that precedes it. (Or maybe this paragraph should move to  
before the preceding one.)

Section 2.2.3:

typo on "athenticaiton"

Section 2.5.3:

typo on "authenticaiton"

Section 2.8.3:

second sentence is hard to follow, suggest something to the effect of  
"The replay attack prevention mechanism in TLS meets this  
requirement."  Also,  typo on "prevetion"

Section 2.13.3:

I suggest repeating the reference to ASAP here. (Maybe with a section  
number if appropriate)

Section 2.14.3:

I suggest repeating the reference to ENRP here. (Maybe with a section  
number if appropriate)

Thanks!

Ben.

On May 1, 2008, at 2:22 PM, <Maureen.Stillman@nokia.com> <Maureen.Stillman@nokia.com 
 > wrote:

> Here is the latest draft threats-12.  The id-nits still gives me a
> warning (but not an error) about the first ASAP reference but I can't
> see anything wrong with it.  I'll work on it again tomorrow.
>
> Let me know if you have further comments.
>
>
> -- Maureen
> Maureen Stillman
> Nokia Services and Software
> Mobile: (607)229-3358
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: ext Ben Campbell [mailto:ben@estacado.net]
> Sent: Tuesday, April 29, 2008 11:55 AM
> To: Stillman Maureen (Nokia-S&S/MtView)
> Cc: gen-art@ietf.org; Sengodan Senthil (NSN - US/Irving);
> matt@strixsystems.com; Erik.Guttman@sun.com; Gopal Ram (NSN - US/San
> Diego); magnus.westerlund@ericsson.com; lyong@ciena.com
> Subject: Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-rserpool- 
> threats-09
>
>
> On Apr 29, 2008, at 9:24 AM, <Maureen.Stillman@nokia.com>
> <Maureen.Stillman@nokia.com  > wrote:
>
>> One additional comment:  The sec-dir reviewer said that he thought a
>> provision for authentication MUST be present and a provision for data
>> confidentiality service SHOULD be present.
>> I went with his recommendation on the MUST, SHOULD text.
>>
>> Hope that is OK with you.
>>
>
> Yes, that works for me.
>
> Thanks!
>
> <draft-ietf-rserpool-threats-12.txt>

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