Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-rserpool-threats-09

[<[e-mail]>]

Ben,

I have attached the updated threats-12 with the changes as noted below.
I also screened the i-d with spell checker and nits checker.

I will submit this latest version of threats-12 to the i-d publisher. 

Thank you for your comments and the resulting improvements to the
document.


-- Maureen
Maureen Stillman
Nokia Services and Software
Mobile: [phone]

-----Original Message-----
From: ext Ben Campbell [mailto:[e-mail]] 
Sent: Monday, May 05, 2008 5:24 PM
To: Stillman Maureen (Nokia-S&S/MtView)
Cc: [e-mail]; Sengodan Senthil (NSN - US/Irving);
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Subject: Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-rserpool-threats-09

Hi Maureen,

This version (which as far as I can tell has not yet been submitted)
addresses all of my substantive comments.

It does, however introduce some new typos and other purely editorial
issues. I would now consider it "ready with nits" from a gen-art review
perspective.

Section 1.0:

The last paragraph in the section now seems redundant given the new
paragraph that precedes it. (Or maybe this paragraph should move to
before the preceding one.)

*** OK, moved.

Section 2.2.3:

typo on "athenticaiton"

*** Fixed and ran spell check.

Section 2.5.3:

typo on "authenticaiton"

*** Fixed.

Section 2.8.3:

second sentence is hard to follow, suggest something to the effect of
"The replay attack prevention mechanism in TLS meets this requirement."
Also,  typo on "prevetion"

*** Yes, much better wording. Fixed.

Section 2.13.3:

I suggest repeating the reference to ASAP here. (Maybe with a section
number if appropriate)

*** OK.

Section 2.14.3:

I suggest repeating the reference to ENRP here. (Maybe with a section
number if appropriate)

*** OK.

Thanks!

Ben.



On May 1, 2008, at 2:22 PM, <[e-mail]>
<[e-mail]  > wrote:

> Here is the latest draft threats-12.  The id-nits still gives me a 
> warning (but not an error) about the first ASAP reference but I can't 
> see anything wrong with it.  I'll work on it again tomorrow.
>
> Let me know if you have further comments.
>
>
> -- Maureen
> Maureen Stillman
> Nokia Services and Software
> Mobile: [phone]
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: ext Ben Campbell [mailto:[e-mail]]
> Sent: Tuesday, April 29, 2008 11:55 AM
> To: Stillman Maureen (Nokia-S&S/MtView)
> Cc: [e-mail]; Sengodan Senthil (NSN - US/Irving); 
> [e-mail]; [e-mail]; Gopal Ram (NSN - US/San 
> Diego); [e-mail]; [e-mail]
> Subject: Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-rserpool-
> threats-09
>
>
> On Apr 29, 2008, at 9:24 AM, <[e-mail]> 
> <[e-mail]  > wrote:
>
>> One additional comment:  The sec-dir reviewer said that he thought a 
>> provision for authentication MUST be present and a provision for data

>> confidentiality service SHOULD be present.
>> I went with his recommendation on the MUST, SHOULD text.
>>
>> Hope that is OK with you.
>>
>
> Yes, that works for me.
>
> Thanks!
>
> <draft-ietf-rserpool-threats-12.txt>

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