Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-rserpool-threats-09

Thanks Maureen. The version you attached addresses all of my comments,  
and in my opinion is ready for publication as an informational RFC.

Thanks!

Ben.

On May 6, 2008, at 8:50 AM, <Maureen.Stillman@nokia.com> wrote:

> Ben,
>
> I have attached the updated threats-12 with the changes as noted  
> below.
> I also screened the i-d with spell checker and nits checker.
>
> I will submit this latest version of threats-12 to the i-d publisher.
>
> Thank you for your comments and the resulting improvements to the
> document.
>
>
> -- Maureen
> Maureen Stillman
> Nokia Services and Software
> Mobile: (607)229-3358
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: ext Ben Campbell [mailto:ben@estacado.net]
> Sent: Monday, May 05, 2008 5:24 PM
> To: Stillman Maureen (Nokia-S&S/MtView)
> Cc: gen-art@ietf.org; Sengodan Senthil (NSN - US/Irving);
> matt@strixsystems.com; Erik.Guttman@sun.com; Gopal Ram (NSN - US/San
> Diego); magnus.westerlund@ericsson.com; lyong@ciena.com
> Subject: Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-rserpool- 
> threats-09
>
> Hi Maureen,
>
> This version (which as far as I can tell has not yet been submitted)
> addresses all of my substantive comments.
>
> It does, however introduce some new typos and other purely editorial
> issues. I would now consider it "ready with nits" from a gen-art  
> review
> perspective.
>
> Section 1.0:
>
> The last paragraph in the section now seems redundant given the new
> paragraph that precedes it. (Or maybe this paragraph should move to
> before the preceding one.)
>
> *** OK, moved.
>
> Section 2.2.3:
>
> typo on "athenticaiton"
>
> *** Fixed and ran spell check.
>
> Section 2.5.3:
>
> typo on "authenticaiton"
>
> *** Fixed.
>
> Section 2.8.3:
>
> second sentence is hard to follow, suggest something to the effect of
> "The replay attack prevention mechanism in TLS meets this  
> requirement."
> Also,  typo on "prevetion"
>
> *** Yes, much better wording. Fixed.
>
> Section 2.13.3:
>
> I suggest repeating the reference to ASAP here. (Maybe with a section
> number if appropriate)
>
> *** OK.
>
> Section 2.14.3:
>
> I suggest repeating the reference to ENRP here. (Maybe with a section
> number if appropriate)
>
> *** OK.
>
> Thanks!
>
> Ben.
>
>
>
> On May 1, 2008, at 2:22 PM, <Maureen.Stillman@nokia.com>
> <Maureen.Stillman@nokia.com  > wrote:
>
>> Here is the latest draft threats-12.  The id-nits still gives me a
>> warning (but not an error) about the first ASAP reference but I can't
>> see anything wrong with it.  I'll work on it again tomorrow.
>>
>> Let me know if you have further comments.
>>
>>
>> -- Maureen
>> Maureen Stillman
>> Nokia Services and Software
>> Mobile: (607)229-3358
>>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: ext Ben Campbell [mailto:ben@estacado.net]
>> Sent: Tuesday, April 29, 2008 11:55 AM
>> To: Stillman Maureen (Nokia-S&S/MtView)
>> Cc: gen-art@ietf.org; Sengodan Senthil (NSN - US/Irving);
>> matt@strixsystems.com; Erik.Guttman@sun.com; Gopal Ram (NSN - US/San
>> Diego); magnus.westerlund@ericsson.com; lyong@ciena.com
>> Subject: Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-rserpool-
>> threats-09
>>
>>
>> On Apr 29, 2008, at 9:24 AM, <Maureen.Stillman@nokia.com>
>> <Maureen.Stillman@nokia.com  > wrote:
>>
>>> One additional comment:  The sec-dir reviewer said that he thought a
>>> provision for authentication MUST be present and a provision for  
>>> data
>
>>> confidentiality service SHOULD be present.
>>> I went with his recommendation on the MUST, SHOULD text.
>>>
>>> Hope that is OK with you.
>>>
>>
>> Yes, that works for me.
>>
>> Thanks!
>>
>> <draft-ietf-rserpool-threats-12.txt>
>
> <draft-ietf-rserpool-threats-12.txt>

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