[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-rlfa-node-protection-09

[Meral Shirazipour <[e-mail]>]

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Document: draft-ietf-rtgwg-rlfa-node-protection-09

Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour

Review Date: 2016-12-28

IETF LC End Date:   2017-01-04 (extension 2017-01-11)

IESG Telechat date: 2017-01-05 (extended)





Summary:

This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have comments.



Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:



-Please spell out Loop-Free Alternate (LFA), Shortest Path First (SPF) at first use.



-typo in draft header:

"Internet-Draft   R-LFA Node-Protection and Manageabilty    December 2016"

                "Manageabilty"--should be-->"Manageability"



-Same typo in Section 3 header: "Manageabilty of Remote-LFA Alternate Paths"

                "Manageabilty"--should be-->"Manageability"



-[Page 6] Section 2.2.3.

"on any of the shortest path", path -->"paths"



-[Page 6] Section 2.2.3.

"from the node Y to primary nexthop E":

"one ECMP path from the node Y":

-->the example in this draft did not use the letter Y for any nodes. Would it be clearer to say node Y is defined in Section 2.2.4?



-Few occurences of "w.r.t to ", the "to" is redundant.



-[Page 1], "can be utilised "--->"can be utilized"



-[Page 9], Section 2.3

"Sections Section 2.3.1 and Section 2.3.2 shows "--->"Section 2.3.1 and Section 2.3.2 show"



-[Page 11], "To determine wether"--->"To determine whether"



-[Page 11], "primary nexthop node"-->"primary nexthop nodes"



-[Page 13], "choose only the ones that does"--->"choose only the ones that do"



-[Page 13], "not gaurantee"--->"not guarantee"



-[Page 14], "Figure 7: Toplogy with multiple ECMP primary nexthops"--->"Figure 7: Topology with multiple ECMP primary nexthops"



-[Page 14], "node-proecting"--->"node-protecting"



-[Page 15], "paths tp PQ-node R2"--->"paths to PQ-node R2"



-[Page 16], "gaurantees node-protection"--->"guarantees node-protection"



-[Page 17],  "above example above"--->"above example"



-[Page 17], "also allow user"--->"also allow the user"



-[Page 18], "the the computing"---->"the computing"



-[Page 18], "in section Section 2.3.2."---->"in Section 2.3.2." (2 occurrences)



-[Page 18], "in section Section 2.3 the"---->"in Section 2.3 the"



-[Page 18], "i.e from "---->"i.e. from "



-[Page 18], "two Remote-LFA alternate path"--->"two Remote-LFA alternate paths"



-[Page 19], "the approach proposed"----->"the proposed approach "



-[Page 19], "is needed keep "---->"is needed to keep"



-[Page 19], "entire toplogy"---->"entire topology"



-General: Is there any proof or extensive simulation that has proved that the mechanism proposed works for various network topologies and not only the one shown in the examples?







Best Regards,

Meral

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Meral Shirazipour

Ericsson Research

www.ericsson.com