[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-sipping-pending-additions-03.txt
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Gonzalo, I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-sipping-pending-additions-03.txt Reviewer: David L. Black Review Date: 10 December 2007 IETF LC End Date: 20 December 2007 Summary: This draft is on the right track, but has open issues, described in the review. Comments: I found open issues in Sections 5.1.2 and 5.1.7: 5.1.2. SUBSCRIBE Bodies A SUBSCRIBE for Pending Additions events MAY contain a body. This body would serve the purpose of filtering the subscription. The definition of such a body is outside the scope of this specification. How is that supposed to be interoperable? A better approach would be to prohibit bodies now and allow a future specification to define them. 5.1.7. Subscriber Processing of NOTIFY Requests NOTIFY requests contain full state. The subscriber does not need to perform any type of information aggregation. This text doesn't explain "the process followed by the subscriber upon receipt of a NOTIFY request, including any logic required to form a coherent resource state (if applicable)" (see Section 4.4.8 of RFC 3265). This text needs to be rewritten and expanded. --- idnits 2.05.03 found three small nits == Line 467 has weird spacing: '... Change in XM...' == Outdated reference: A later version (-07) exists of draft-ietf-simple-xcap-diff-05 == Outdated reference: A later version (-03) exists of draft-ietf-sip-consent-framework-01 Thanks, --David ---------------------------------------------------- David L. Black, Distinguished Engineer EMC Corporation, 176 South St., Hopkinton, MA 01748 +1 (508) 293-7953 FAX: +1 (508) 293-7786 black_david@emc.com Mobile: +1 (978) 394-7754 ---------------------------------------------------- _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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