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Gonzalo Camarillo <Gonzalo.Camarillo@ericsson.com> Fri, 25 May 2007 07:33 UTC

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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-art review of draft-ietf-dhc-relay-agent-flags-03.txt
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Hi,

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.


Draft: draft-ietf-dhc-relay-agent-flags-03.txt
Reviewer: Gonzalo Camarillo <Gonzalo.Camarillo@ericsson.com>
Review Date: 25 Mayo 2006

Summary:

This draft is ready for publication as a PS RFC.


Comments:

The acronym DHCP should be expanded on its first use in the title and in
the abstract.

Last line of the first paragraph of the Introduction:

The period should go after the references:

OLD:
DHCP Server.  [RFC2131] [RFC2132] [RFC3046]

NEW:
DHCP Server  [RFC2131] [RFC2132] [RFC3046].
            ^                              ^


Thanks,

Gonzalo




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