Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-lorawan-10

Robert Sparks <rjsparks@nostrum.com> Mon, 12 October 2020 14:06 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-lorawan-10
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Hi Oliver -

I did see the message, and things looked fine to me. I didn't see any 
outstanding questions, so didn't reply - apologies. No need to wait on 
me before revising.

RjS

On 10/12/20 8:35 AM, Olivier Gimenez wrote:
>
> Hi Robert,
>
> Did you see those answers ? Do you want to review them before we 
> publish an new ID ?
>
> Thank you
>
> Olivier
>
> *From:*Olivier Gimenez
> *Sent:* 05 October 2020 11:54
> *To:* 'Robert Sparks' <rjsparks@nostrum.com>om>; gen-art@ietf.org
> *Cc:* lp-wan@ietf.org; last-call@ietf.org; 
> draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-lorawan.all@ietf.org
> *Subject:* RE: Genart last call review of 
> draft-ietf-lpwan-schc-over-lorawan-10
>
> Dear Robert,
>
> Thank you for your review. I answered in your email.
>
> Olivier
>
> > -----Original Message-----
>
> > From: Robert Sparks via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org 
> <mailto:noreply@ietf.org>>
>
> > The abstract says "This is called a profile." It would be better to say
>
> > something like "This document specifies a profile of RFC8724."
>
> I changed the paragraph to the following (commit f6a3ca7 
> <https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/f6a3ca7af50f1c468ad7171c4911760434567808>):
>
> This document specifies a profile of [RFC8724] to use SCHC in LoRaWAN 
> networks,
>
> and provides elements such as efficient parameterization and modes of
>
> operation.
>
> > What does "other Internet networks" mean? Please replace the phrase with
>
> > something more descriptive.
>
> Thanks, I rephrased it for: (commit 94823f8 
> <https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/94823f864f4e42c6a0ed934bd0e59864cf22e701>)
>
> SCHC provides a generic framework that enables those devices to 
> communicate on
>
> IP networks.
>
> > The word "efficient" in the last sentence of the introduction is 
> puzzling.
>
> > Could it simply be removed?
>
> Ok (commit 94823f8 
> <https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/94823f864f4e42c6a0ed934bd0e59864cf22e701>)
>
> > As the shepherd report notes, there are figures that need to be 
> reworked to
>
> > satisfy column constraints.
>
> Fixed in 8ce2196 
> <https://github.com/Acklio/schc-over-lorawan/pull/35/commits/8ce2196a301a0072c791df1363655453b750eee8> 
> (Also fixes informative RFC which are not normative)
>
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