[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-signaling-09.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Sun, 22 March 2015 20:55 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-signaling-09.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20150313
IETF LC End Date: 20150318
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 I read the 09 version but was too busy to prepare the IETF meeting
to send these few comments. Note I know the 10 version is available
so I adjusted by comments (i.e., I don't raise concerns about removed
or improved texts :-).

 - 2 page 4 (end node): e.g. -> e.g.,

(it seems the very few other comments no longer apply! :-)