[Gen-art] Re:gen-art LC review: draft-hollenbeck-epp-rfc3732bis-03.txt

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

This document is ready for publication as a draft standard.
The implementation report seems quite sufficient to justify advancement.

I have no opinion on the down-ref issue, as I have not tried to 
determine the actual current rules.

nit: I believe the last paragraph of 1.1 (in which "ns1.example1.com 
MUST be treated as an internal host") assumes that example1.com and 
example2.com are both handled by the same repository (since the 
notion of internal / external is described as relative to a 
repository.)  But the text does not say that they are both 
represented in the same repository.

nit: I believe the MAY in line 2 of 2.3 (Status Values) is a 
MUST.  Or a "may".  But not MAY.  It does not give 
permission.  Rather, it is restricting who is able to perform an 
operation.(line 5 uses a proper MAY.)

Yours,
Joel M. Halpern

>---------------------------
>Reviewer: Joel Halpern
>
>- 'Extensible Provisioning Protocol (EPP) Host Mapping '
>    <draft-hollenbeck-epp-rfc3732bis-03.txt> as a Draft Standard
>
>IETF LC ends on 2006-11-11.
>
>Note that the document involves a reference to a document
>at a lower level of standardization:  RFC 3339 (Date and Time on
>the Internet: Timestamps).
>
>The document includes an appendix containing a list of changes from the
>relevant RFC.  While there were several text changes to clarify portions
>of the text as a result of implementation experience, there were no
>schema changes needed when updating the documents.  The EPP version
>specified in the original RFCs and the -bis documents remains the same.
>
>The file can be obtained via
>http://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-hollenbeck-epp-rfc3732bis-03.txt
>
>
>Implementation Report can be accessed at:
>http://www.ietf.org/IESG/Implementations/RFCs3730-3734_implem.txt

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