[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-avt-rtp-evrc-wb-03

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reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
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Document: draft-ietf-avt-rtp-evrc-wb-03
Reviewer: Ben Campbell	
Review Date: 2007-10-18
IETF LC End Date: 2007-10-22

Summary:

This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that  
should be fixed before publication.

Comments:

I found the draft well written and easy to understand. I only had one  
substantive nit; the rest are editorial only:

Substantive:

Section 17, 11th example (I think):

"Example offer answer exchanges for interoperability between legacy  
(RFC XXXX) and updated EVRC-B(RFC 4788) implementations:"

Are the RFC references reversed? RFC XXX is the updated, not the  
legacy, version, right?

Editorial:

Section 1:

Odd spacing between sentences. Sometime there are no spaces,  
sometimes there are two. I did not notice this elsewhere.

Section 3, second paragraph (Personal pet-peeve; feel free to ignore.):

Constructs like "...defined in [5]."  create extra work for the  
reader in the form of page flipping. " Things like "defined in <doc- 
name> [5]",  or "...defined in [mnemonic symbol] " are much more  
friendly.

Section 9, first paragraph:

s/"EVRCB, EVRCB0"/"EVRCB and EVRCB0"

Section 10, title:

s/attributs/attributes

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