[Gen-art] GEN-Art review of draft-ietf-isis-layer2-09

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Document: draft-ietf-isis-layer2-09

Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty

Review Date: 19 January 2011

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Summary:  The document looks pretty good overall, but there are some edits that are recommended below.


Major issues:



Minor issues:







Nits/editorial comments:

Abstract:

Include name for acronym TLV and IS-IS, both are used before being defined.



Include commas in the following sentence:

Change from: “in this document are generic layer 2 additions and specific ones as needed are”

To: “in this document are generic layer 2 additions and specific ones, as needed, are”



Section 1:

Paragraph 1, Line 5:

Change From: Layer

To: layer



Paragraph 2, Line 2:

Include acronym for PDU



Paragraph 2, Line 3:

Change from: “generic layer 2 additions and specific ones as needed are defined in”

To: “generic layer 2 additions and specific ones, as needed, are defined in”



Section 2:

Line 1:

Change from: “In this section we specify the enhancements”

To either: “This section specifies the enhancements”

Or: “In this section, we specify the enhancements”



Line 2:

Change from: “Layer-2”

To: “layer 2”

OR make the use of this consistent in the document.


Section 2.1:

Bullet 4:

Make use of “Layer-2-IS-IS” consistent in the document.



Paragraph 2:

Note use of Level 1 and Layer 2 in this paragraph to make consistent (dash/no dash, upper or lower case “L”)



Define acronym LSP in first line



Section 2.2:

Line 1:

Change from: “Multi Topology aware”

To: “Multi-Topology Aware”



Bullet 5 (acronym already defined, it can be completely spelled out or use the defined acronym):

Change From: “sub-TLVs: The MT aware Port Capabilities TLV”

To: “sub-TLVs: The MT-PORT_CAP TLV”



Last sentence: Include acronym for IIH.