[Gen-art] Re: Gen ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-alarm-spec-03.txt

Forwarding to Lou's new email address.

Adrian
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<Black_David@emc.com>
Sent: Wednesday, August 09, 2006 4:59 PM
Subject: Gen ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-alarm-spec-03.txt

> Lou,
>
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for
> draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-alarm-spec-03.txt .
>
> For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
> <http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html>.
>
> Please resolve these comments along with any other
> Last Call comments you may receive.
>
> This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits
> that should be fixed before publication.
>
> The draft is generally well-written and to the point.  All
> of these comments are minor.
> - Section 3.1.  Say why the two-leading-one-bits form is used
> for ALARM_SPEC objects in this section in addition to
> Section 3.1.4.  It would be ok to move the text from Section
> 3.1.4 up into Section 3.1.  Also, if there's a good explanation
> for why C-Type 1 and 2 are Reserved, that explanation should
> be added.
> - Section 3.1.1 should give guidance for and examples of appropriate
> use of Severity values.
> - Section 3.1.2 has a number of SHOULDs and SHOULD NOTs.  There needs
> to be an explanation of why these strong recommendations are
> being made (which would imply consequences of not following
> the recommendations) and/or a description of what goes wrong
> when they're not followed.  The overall explanation appears
> to be a desire to supply enough basic information to allow
> the recipient to understand the alarm (this info can be quite
> important as the recipient may be dealing with a crisis of
> which the alarm is a part).  The "MAY" for the ref
> count TLV needs to be explained  (why would it be used?).
> - Section 3.1.2 on p10 discusses adding alarm objects to the
> "state of LSPs".  The quoted phrase needs to be defined -
> I think the addition is to the LSP state communicated by
> RSVP Path and Resv messages.
>
> Thanks,
> --David
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