[Gen-art] Gen ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-alarm-spec-03.txt

Lou,

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for
draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-alarm-spec-03.txt .

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Please resolve these comments along with any other
Last Call comments you may receive.

This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits
that should be fixed before publication.

The draft is generally well-written and to the point.  All
of these comments are minor.
- Section 3.1.  Say why the two-leading-one-bits form is used
	for ALARM_SPEC objects in this section in addition to
	Section 3.1.4.  It would be ok to move the text from Section
	3.1.4 up into Section 3.1.  Also, if there's a good explanation
	for why C-Type 1 and 2 are Reserved, that explanation should
	be added.
- Section 3.1.1 should give guidance for and examples of appropriate
	use of Severity values.
- Section 3.1.2 has a number of SHOULDs and SHOULD NOTs.  There needs
	to be an explanation of why these strong recommendations are
	being made (which would imply consequences of not following
	the recommendations) and/or a description of what goes wrong
	when they're not followed.  The overall explanation appears
	to be a desire to supply enough basic information to allow
	the recipient to understand the alarm (this info can be quite
	important as the recipient may be dealing with a crisis of
	which the alarm is a part).  The "MAY" for the ref
	count TLV needs to be explained  (why would it be used?).
- Section 3.1.2 on p10 discusses adding alarm objects to the
	"state of LSPs".  The quoted phrase needs to be defined -
	I think the addition is to the LSP state communicated by
	RSVP Path and Resv messages.

Thanks,
--David
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